My Last Poem

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  1. iLL Script.

    iLL Script. ~Poetic~

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    yes dats right, dis is my last poem i will be postin'. i'm not leavin' tha site just leavin' tha realm 4 awhile if not 4 good, so i leave everyone with dis
    Farewell ::Waves::​


    I look at u my empty page
    beautiful, white, and gleaming,
    tha lines that run across your grain
    will somehow contain my screaming.

    I've tried to break this sad affair
    out of guilt, out of despair,
    but no one knows me like u do
    my beautiful page with lines of blue.

    All my secrets u have kept
    of my youth, my truths, my sorrows
    you've accepted me with my darkened past
    and all my dreams for tomorrow.

    every failure,
    every moment of glory,
    all my imagination
    every sad, or happy story.

    When there wasn't a friend
    that could lend me his shoulder,
    I have laidened u, page,
    filled u border to border.

    I have written of queens
    that lay on tarnished thrones,
    or of wandering kings,
    and tha streets that they've roamed.

    When mom finally left
    as I wrote on u, page,
    u endured all my fears,
    and was stained by my tears.

    U have given yourself to me
    line after line,
    you've laid under my pen
    time endless time.

    Endured essays and poems
    some that do or don't rhyme,
    together we have traveled
    from rivers to shrines.

    I often have wondered
    what complaint you'd have said,
    or tha color of your blood
    should u sometime had bled.

    I hold u, my paper,
    so close to my heart
    me of flesh, blood, and bone,
    u of wood, ink, and bark.




    El rey-on greener grass
    Allnakey-rewound tapes
    Psycho69-trip to insanity
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  2. Evg.poet

    Evg.poet As the Heart Speaks...

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    That was deep....really deep and expressive....no complaints here....sorry to see u leave but sometimes you hadve to do what u have 2 do
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  3. Consequential

    Consequential Spiritual Mind

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    real nice poem.. it's a shame to see one of the better poets go down but.. you do what you've gota do ya feel me? (^^^ didn't see that she said that...urgh! lol)... as i said, this is an emotional poem and a nice way to go out on...for some reason it reminds me or jay-z's retirement.. and the song he left when he went out...

    real cool poem, you were always a cool head around these parts

    enjoy life blah blah lol

    pz easy man

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  4. RealMS

    RealMS Ne te quaesiveris extra

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    That's good, as it always is and was. It's always profound. Anyway, I knew it was gonna come around that time for you to be sayin what you gotta say, but always remember you got an angel watching out for you. Much love as always, and keep that head of yours up.
    -Much Love
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  5. Boricua_mami

    Boricua_mami CAPO'S QUEEN

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    that was very dope you should enter in to a poerty contest
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  6. nathedawg

    nathedawg New Member

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    I have written of queens
    that lay on tarnished thrones,
    or of wandering kings,
    and tha streets that they've roamed

    that shit was fire son, why are u leavin if i may ask, i remember when u used to post a shit load, what happened just lost interest? keep ya head up peace
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  7. Subconcious

    Subconcious CiPrIoLa DyNaStY

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    It's definately a shame to know such well written pieces from the King won't be here too much anymore, if not just plain anymore. This was a good write and I just wanna say if it is your last, "What a way to go, brah"
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  8. lewdDog

    lewdDog Life is are own illusion

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    this is really good i enojyed all of it ..real deep...hope it dont take u to long to come back if u decide to at all
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  9. Shibaby

    Shibaby betcha dollar i can do it

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    yea i like this.....
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  10. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    That was a real nice man, the imagery was on point as always and the subject matter was deep. Don't really wanna see you bounce out the poetry realm, but do what ya gotta do.


    Stay Up, Much Love, Peace
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  11. MarQuise*

    MarQuise* Can You Hear Me*

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    sweety, everything you have ever done has captued me, I Lv all your work, and I think that you are one of the best poets on the board. Its a sad time to see you go, but u gotta do, wha you gotta do. This was Deep, and it was different to anything ive seen from you, or any other poet for that matter. Glad to see things worked out for you aswell, you know i was thinkin about you, and alwayz will...
    Much Much Lv...
    *S*
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  12. JBB Sports Man

    JBB Sports Man New Member

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    great poem...loved the imagery and scheme..very heart-felt and open...great job...
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  13. Alpengiest

    Alpengiest Wit-Eeyore..like pooh.

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    damn homie, farewell, nice poem. Got a lil repetitve with sayin page too much but it had some really good lines in there. Pz
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  14. this was beautiful Tony, this was a beautiful relationship..I gathered you were writing about potery, but lots of that could have been to a friend or lover..I Think you are really growing with your writing, and I hope you become closer to it and it is something you learn to master and treasure..Not sure why you're leaving, but anyway, do what you have to do..

    blessings upon your ways
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  15. Blunted Reality

    Blunted Reality Still Blunted on Reality

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    I am left in utter amazement. This was beyond well done, you really put yourself in this poem. Sorrry this will be your last poem in this forum, for you have a great talent that is needed. Farewell.
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  16. Black Liquid

    Black Liquid New Member

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    its so easy to confide yourself to an inanimate object, everyone needs outlets. a notebook is like an inner sanctum, if you read a broads diary you may as well seen her naked. if youre gonna be out, this was a good joint leave with, nice reminder
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  17. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    youve grown as a writer while i was away.....you will be back =)

    peace and blessings
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  18. RRxKiLaKaZ

    RRxKiLaKaZ Battle Obsessed Warlord

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    truly a masterful work
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  19. babyangel17

    babyangel17 New Member

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    i loved that it was extremly good im sorri to see ya go but keep yo head up ight peace - much love
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  20. Consequential

    Consequential Spiritual Mind

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    They always come back...
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