My first shot @ spoken word.... peep.... AN ODE TO BEER!

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  1. Klasic

    Klasic Im not that friendly when this cup is empty

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    An Ode to BEER by Klasic De la smoka


    When i first saw you Beer,
    Im not gonna lie to you,
    i hated your smell,taste,texture
    I even hated your attitude.

    I tried you once,
    That night with the fellas,
    Eveybody had there hands on you,
    I Guess i was Jealous,
    Not really jealous more like
    i was intrigued,
    Cuz i was just getting over that one girl
    ya know...... weed.

    But anyways, that first touch was oh so cold,
    Must be weird having so many fans,
    All the guys want you,
    wheter it be bottle or can.

    My first taste of you,
    WHOO WEEE
    Damn girl you strong!,
    I never made my face squinch up that long.

    So i left you alone for several years,
    Till that night, i got bored,
    But damn beer, just cuz we reunited
    you didn't have to leave me on the floor.

    Oh yeah that was rude,
    The Next day i felt awful,
    Now i see why driving with you
    is so unlawfull.

    So time has prgressed,
    and i have grown oh so found of you,
    I love your mexican cousin corona
    and even your trashy cousin BUD too,

    Your family runs deep
    and i must say you' all have great taste,
    Good to take to a game,the bar, or just
    sitting around my place.

    But damn beer since we been hanging hard,
    My belly's getting big for some reason,
    Quit that laughing beer,
    It just must be the air in the season.

    We've came along way beer, and
    Your one of the best friends i've ever had,
    Now i can see why your such good friends,
    with my mom and dad.

    All my friends like you,
    so your welcome when were hanging,
    I love you beer, with no more words of explaining.

    LOL
    test
  2. Hitman J

    Hitman J lets get get get it....

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    MUAHAHAHAH

    good shit

    shit was redunclelent
    test
  3. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    Was there a hidden meaning or was this just about beer and was just in your face? Heh. Anyway, I guess you had something on your mind and that was beer, well either on your mind or in your "hand". Ha. But, decent poem for a beginner, I guess? Nothing else to say, really. My blessings..

    *return the favor by dropping some knowledge on my piece.

    http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?s=&threadid=575322
    test
  4. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    Man, what's funny about this piece is I can actually picture you half drunk on the stage performing it. lol I can relate from every aspect of it...Matter of fact, soon as I get home from work I'm crackin' me open a cold one.
    test
  5. mocha_licious

    mocha_licious New Member

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    lol.........i really liked reading this piece..it kept my interest and i feel it was well written...(tha beer "had u at hello".....u can say)


    i sense that you're really creative and intuitive...i'd love to read more of your pieces...

    bigups and nice technique

    ~one love always~
    test
  6. *GeMiNeYeZ*

    *GeMiNeYeZ* ~§¤Sweet Shinobi¤§~

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    lol.. that was cute. i actually enjoyed reading that though beer is nasty...
    test
  7. Klasic

    Klasic Im not that friendly when this cup is empty

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    thanks u guys i mean that
    test
  8. ILL Poppy

    ILL Poppy New Member

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    lol it was good man... funny a shit... had me rolling...
    test
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