Moon Counter Point

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  1. Coup d'état

    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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    This is a bit off the deep end. however, I just pay attention to language and some meaning. This was just written from the back of the head - so please keep that in mind and please don't search for too deep a meaning. However, there is one within.
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    Moon-phase counterpoint sets the scene. It plots itself in phases. Particles watts emit curious misanthropic faces. Parts to a watch alarming the ticks that tocks are missin' in tropic places.

    It's Fisted pandemic ferocity, lifted. raised high
    It's resisted hypnotic anomalies; listless nearsighted lies

    Raised not literally in the physically. But figuratively praised a lot whimsically. Or rather, creatively as faded spots in the imaginary.
    Grown locally most organically. Drawn from deep wells like how air feeds a organ manically.

    It follows as this:

    New Moon; a bright light might guide right, despite it cast in slight narrow sights.

    Waxing Crescent; makes night skies relaxing. Present. Nice eyes relapsing bright nitride fluorescents.

    First Quarter; middle grounds expand borders as fiddle sounds bend peptide disorders.

    Waxing Gibbous; One half basks in dramatica steadfast as the other still masks behind galactica at last.

    Full Moon; Ode to joy. A dirty opinion whore.









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  2. BLACK ATTICUS

    BLACK ATTICUS An Actual Show Rocka!!

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    indeed, it reads like a free write, so in that case i can only say that you have a talent for choosing words as well as putting them together in a rather natural rhythm.
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  3. the omega man

    the omega man so, it goes

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    The rhyming is mesmerizing, I love it. Not use to seeing this type of rhyming from u. I don't know if you know but you didn't rhyme the last line, "opinion whore" and "full moon" don't rhyme...haha j/k

    Any way I don't know what you're talking about...I am completely lost. Help me find my way, Coup.
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  4. Coup d'état

    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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    Thanks you two for reading and commenting.

    Omega, you did a mind blowing interpretation on the Sleeping Giants poem so you should be able to find one here; meaning that is. I can flow pretty sick, but the sicker it is the less meaning there is.

    This I have no idea what I'm really talking about, it all came from the back of the head. It's buried and cryptic.

    It's something about facing a crisis and using your own attributes to handle it....very vaguely I guess.
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