Misunderstood Missionary

Discussion in 'Poetry Realm' started by Old Soul, Oct 1, 2003.

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  1. Old Soul

    Old Soul Nipple Nibbler

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    Compassionate philanthropist directed by a god to relay a message.
    But I forgot it during my journey & I'm a long way from heaven.
    Maybe that was the way he meant it, to teach my spirit a lesson.
    Or maybe it was my fragile mind caving in from immense pressure.
    Taken some intense measures not to teach my methods to peasants.
    But an unprecedented percentage of men confess in my presence.
    I didn't ask for this unpleasant burden he bestowed upon my shoulders.
    That left a kink in my posture I didn't notice til I got older.
    So I stand with a slight slouch & struggle with scoliosis
    Try to juggle relationships with pupils & unholy posers.
    They told me Moses started what I'd finish but as I grimace,
    my soul decomposes as people's heart & pride diminish.
    I tried the timid approach & applied a limit on close,
    friends I would enlighten. They'd pretend not to be frightened,
    as I'd heighten their senses, despite apprehension,
    they knew, to harm, was not my intention. But as the tension increased,
    between my henchmen & beasts, I became entrenched in intrigue.
    Accused of pretending to be the legendary messiah.
    I was merely a missionary with a charismatic persona.
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  2. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    Dont see how this would offend any other than the blind...because they wouldnt be able to read it...but I am feelin it like brail...Anyway, good shit here...This is one of the first times I've read your work, and I am not disappointed...
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  3. illpoetical

    illpoetical raising the bar everyday

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    yeah this was really good i was feeling it
    uno
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  4. Blunted Reality

    Blunted Reality Still Blunted on Reality

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    this was amazing...felt where you were coming from...keep it up.
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  5. Old Soul

    Old Soul Nipple Nibbler

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    Thanks people.
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  6. Den-S

    Den-S .:.The Chosen One.:.

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    yeah nice..had a sick flow and vocab was dope...keep it up
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  7. MisterEThoughts

    MisterEThoughts MysteryOfUntoldTruth

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    nah it didn't i thought this was very pretty keep it upp
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  8. MADDRAPPER

    MADDRAPPER I own you motherfuckers..

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    hey look you're down on me but many can write like this no rhyme or real flow but the content is nice but look here I can only class this as effective writing, no where near a keystyle or real poetry now listen up why not this

    Protected by the rod and directed by god to relay
    the word to stray herds of lost sheep with false feet and stay
    on the wrong grass, the strong pass by them every day
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  9. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    ^maddrapper are you slow or some shit? People dont want you droppin your damn rhymes in they post, show love and move on kid, jesus christ...

    recluse i would have never thought you wrote poetry man, this was some real shit here. Hope you post more

    one luv
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  10. Old Soul

    Old Soul Nipple Nibbler

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    No rhyme or real flow? Can you read?
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  11. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    Wonderful writing as always......I know i keep saying this but the whole "compassionate philanthropist" concept is like wow.......

    madrapper-sometimes you gotta dig man
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  12. FukkedUPKidR

    FukkedUPKidR Guest

    I like it lots...you always have the creative ideas and concepts. It's nice and different ..from what I usually read. Enjoyable, peace :)
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  13. MADDRAPPER

    MADDRAPPER I own you motherfuckers..

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    this whack kid say i write jack and jill but its plain after the responses on other boards yall cats in here belong to each other this stuff he wrote is effective writing and I bet he's a teacher or a teacher's son the average audience couldn't jive with this good content but you should've rhymed it doe it would sit aside from the political gobbly ²²²² around here for real doe for me not digging it as poetryor a keystyle now you know show some respect for my skills i rhyme all my shit how many can do that ?
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  14. Lyme

    Lyme Guest

    Im glad youre my friend.. slippers?
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  15. Old Soul

    Old Soul Nipple Nibbler

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    There's rhymes littered throughout this piece.

    You're truly incompetent.
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  16. FukkedUPKidR

    FukkedUPKidR Guest


    I guess everyone has a different perception on what poetry is.........there are many skillfull people who rhyme in their pieces, and many other skillfull people who do not..you have to look at the piece as a whole not just what you think is WRONG with it
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  17. Old Soul

    Old Soul Nipple Nibbler

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    But, every one of these lines has rhymes.

    & I put mad inner rhymes in it too.
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  18. Ax Cess

    Ax Cess Huh...

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    this was tight...i wouldnt call it poetry more open mic'ish but this was very good....lol whats goin on in that head of yours man....
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  19. Royallyraggid

    Royallyraggid New Member

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    I was feelin this...nice lines with some definite depth..thats what i usually look for...it had it's own flow that i could see...i don't know
    what madrapper or whatever's trippin on...i thought it was pretty ill....

    peace,
    Employee of the Minute
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  20. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    I loved it...and dont worry bout offending anybody in here...everything is excepted if its poetry..and i usually can find a glimmer of light in anyones piece....i didnt have to search for one here..i definitally can understand where u comin from with this...it can be real crazy at times

    nice drop....u should drop by here more often
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