Merging

Discussion in 'Poetry Realm' started by Carpe Noctem, Aug 12, 2012.

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  1. Carpe Noctem

    Carpe Noctem Neos Helios

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    Define me
    In a language I won't speak
    Paint me
    In colors my eyes won't compute

    I won't continue
    To build these houses made of straw
    Or overhaul the earth and sky
    After every bout of rain

    Today
    I'm merging with my shadow.
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  2. Carpe Noctem

    Carpe Noctem Neos Helios

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  3. GaLaTeA

    GaLaTeA Well-Known Member

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    I'm interpreting this as rationale taking over a dreamer. (I'm probably way wrong, though):scared:

    Magnificently written piece.
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  4. Shadow

    Shadow Kotaro's Master

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    impressive short piece. A lot of imagery in such a quick read.
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    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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    did not like the word 'compute", it seemed a word too synthetic for a piece about an organic coming of age...good job

    I'd used: "dilate"
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    Chavvah New Member

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    This was delightful!!! I actually think the word 'compute' ran quite smoothly with the word 'speak' as both of these words gave power to the language and the eyes!! Good job.
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