Discussion in 'Poetry Realm' started by IAmDonoTg, Aug 30, 2013.
OK, I guess I'll be the first to respond to this. Ummm the imagery was predictable, the flow came and went as the rhyme scheme was not consistent. You picked up and slowed down... at times I got into it but then you switched up, the message at the end was not strong at all and the middle was filled with a bunch of fillers. A chess game really...? I didn't see that coming. I don't mean to be overly critical but this piece has been told and retold a million times and this doesn't even fall in the middle.
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