Make Peace Not War

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  1. Predator INC

    Predator INC New Member

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    She raises her white flag in hopes her love will reach the masses
    shes sickened by the tyranny devised by the greed of the wealthy
    tears stream eloquently from her face bc her msg falls on deaf ears
    even tho she is the key to everything in life she is viewed as nothing
    drunkeness and perversion of power overshadow her potential effects
    so we teeter and sway into gladly into a world not designed for us
    where the dollar is powerful - not love. where monarchs rule - not the people
    They scream WAR! WAR! WAR! as the blood of their slaves lay meshing in the sands
    Phoenixes of doom scream from iron charriots with every move it makes it leaves destruction
    men prepare themselves to fight for a cause and take pride in their oblivious slavery
    if solomons could only speak and enlighten us with what we do not have the ability to have
    then maybe our children would see a brighter day.
    test
  2. the omega man

    the omega man so, it goes

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    i don't like cliches...."falls on deaf ears", "raises her white flag"

    However, halfway through u got really poetic and I like the message

    I really like this line, "Phoenixes of doom scream from iron charriots with every move it makes it leaves destruction"
    test
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