Magic ( A love poem for my fiance)

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  1. TheEntity

    TheEntity New Member

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    I guess that now would be the time to confess to you
    That my love for you is made from more than just two
    Hearts.....
    That exist in my life
    One made for a husband and another one for a wife
    We met it was more than just chemistry
    Your eyes found mines and explored deeper into me
    This world aint ready for us to progress
    Cause you took something someone didnt
    You took my loving soul from out of my chest
    We were introduced and you told me ya name was "Magic"
    I stared in wonder and then started to laugh and
    Slowly I became to see that you told no lies
    Because it was your "magic" that made me love you
    And took my love by surprize
    The first time we kissed I felt as if it wasnt long enough
    And I know that with you my road will never be tough
    The first time you held me I felt so secure
    And then it came to the point, I would kill just to keep you near
    I came to realize that you are forever my fiance
    Because i'm dangerously in love just like the words from beyonce
    Without your "magic" in my life I might as well die
    And I would dare another female to take you Ill even give them a try
    But I know that you will never leave me
    Cause I know at one point of our life together you will need me
    Ill do anything, any major sacrifice
    Just for you to say "I do" so I can be your wife
    Then we will get older and have a lil seed together
    And then will be a family that will stand though any kind of weather
    I just want you to know I love you and nothing can never change
    test
  2. unspoken1

    unspoken1 Revolutionary Wordsmen

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    this was decent...didnt like the beyounce line too much though....anyways this was decent....to the realm which many of us poets call home...keep writing
    test
  3. eatemup

    eatemup New Member

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    this was a nice poem emotional very nice
    test
  4. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    ehh a decent piece you got here. I think that beyonce line messed it up for me though. Welcome to the realm.

    one luv
    test
  5. Eklektic

    Eklektic Hilal Beats

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  6. pizza boy

    pizza boy New Member

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    i liked it man whats up with this part

    And I would dare another female to take you Ill even give them a try
    test
  7. TheEntity

    TheEntity New Member

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    Thank you

    with this line "And I would dare another female to take you Ill even give them a try" I meant that our love is so strong and me being so confident with our relationship that I would give a female a try to take him but I know no one can

    But thank you for your comments and look for more from me
    test
  8. 49th Prophet

    49th Prophet Dark Magic Inferno

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    well you got your point across, nice piece
    keep droppin

    much love

    peace
    test
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