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  1. Shadow

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    Intro:


    Welcome to the home of the hot and saucy RapMusic.com Topical and Storytelling League, and its magazine, week 14 edition ! First, I want to thank each writer who is participating this week, much love brothas and sistas. Though we have a small pool of writers this week, we are in no wise in shortage of talented writers nor are we lacking things to talk about. Kuja is coming back, nom is lurking and the tournament is around the corner ! Memes are surfacing and creeping in and SHAD is still posting women pics, INK is still working the blue ballz, Pat is still PM'ing everyone at RM.com all at once! and Breathless voted last week...what?!?!?!

    Spread the word brothas and sistas, let's make an effort to recruit more writers for the upcoming tournament. Shadow in years past has always closed out each season with a superb tournament... topped off by a handsome cash prize for the winner. Last year's winner was NOM. Who will it be this year ?

    Anyhow let's roll on with the magazine. And before we do, I want each reader to offer suggestions or ideas on what to include in future mags. Think outside the box.

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    Week 13 Recaps


    Shadowarriorfs vs Theinkwell
    http://board.rapmusic.com/rapmusic-...shadowwariorfs-9-3-vs-2-theinkwell-3-1-a.html
    Ink wins (2-0)
    RSTL Week 13 saw a unique element spun around the meme "Kevin Chang" and his infamous year book quote: "It's not enough that I should succeed: others should fail" From what I can remember this is the first time I seen two heads agree to do the same meme topic, an RSTL first ? Perhaps. Both Shad and theink agreed to write to this concept; to explore, spin and twist up Kevin unto words and then into life ! So, how did they interpret ? Who succeeded, that one should fail ? Ink took this battle technically, but Shad came equally as crafty, though in the end Inks approach was enough to secure C. Cap'e tan, OH CapEtan! (champion! Congrats lil inky).
    Shad came at us the readers pretty complete. He fleshed out a lot of back story and if you think about what he did; He really created a reason to continue on in a whole new direction with ...a sequel ? He established Kevin in his youth, and in his interpretation, it was the tragedy of his parents death by hands of Korean Nationals that filled the role as antagonists! We ended with Kevin laying claim to his power- his complete acknowledgment of what his parents meant to him and how they taught him to do what he did do! At all cost he was reborn and "others shall fail" took on a whole new meaning. Go peep it y'all. We ended with room to not only inquire about what's next, but to actually want to know what's next! Great job Shad. Your structure and flow were hot within the margins and because of that your tale read smooth, smooth and smooth.
    What about ink ?
    Theinks really played with the quote: "It's not enough that I should succeed; others should fail". Looking back on this written, his whole concept revolves around this main theme. Ink creates an inner dialog and speaks for Kevin as he runs us the readers through what's going on. We discover that the quote is in fact mis-attributed to Kevin and it's not enough that it was false, but it has now taken on a life of it's own. Not only are other students, even the media and friends taking things to new harsh levels, however playful, but Kevin sees it a different way and counters their enthusiasm with grief. With hints of bullying and meme stardom virus, ink really contrasted Kevin against what others often over look in the moment: A deep hurt that if not stemmed will grow ugly. And this is what has happened ! What ink did here that was enough to defeat the talented Shadowarrior was great poetic imagery...just peep his opening. Nuff said!
    Great job both writers.


    Breathless vs Coup
    http://board.rapmusic.com/rapmusic-...r-3-breathless-7-5-vs-4-coup-detat-1-0-a.html
    Coup wins (2-0)
    This was an odd battle for a few reasons. Chief being that in the Sanctuary forum me and breath have a long history of battling even there! He bombs his beliefs at me with iron clad fists and I'll trench in and pounce on any wholes in his theology I see, shooting back as a sniper!...it's a war brothas and sistas, though wounded both, Breath and I have become friends in the end and still enjoy war, none the less.
    He came about "GOD" and I came about Drugs ? Most would say it would be breath coming about drugs and me coming about the Most High. Not in this case. Breath wrote a personal verse detailing unconscious thoughts about his disdain for the Most High. Whoever he was calling god in that verse, it was not the True Eternal Creator, that is for sure! He brought up key questions and if you take a step back and really cut through the hype, breath's written was more about seeking truth than laying claim to it! Breath it will come brother! I applaud the intelligent thoughts and the stream of ideas, which really brought this verse to a coffee house of esteem. No decaf please!
    I came short and tripped out. In the end that was enough! Great battle breathless, and a nice audio to boot.


    Patrown vs Deathstryque
    http://board.rapmusic.com/rapmusic-...ue-1-2-vs-6-patrown-0-1-a.html#post1069512036
    Patrown wins via no show (brothas and sistas, Pat had the verse of the week)
    Why verse of the week ? Take up a chair, hang up your coat and stay awhile. Pat had a brilliant concept and a even better delivery. In his written he came at us readers with the inner voice of a father, and in his thoughts we learn about the mother...but what's trippy here is that all this happens within a inner dialog aimed at his daughter...mother was dead!!! That was insane bruh! I liked the eerie talk and the statements made withing such short lines, 20 to be exact! Such raw, image laden lines. PROPS. This was calculated and the use of the daughter to explain his situation and the actions brought against the mother was note worthy. We learned so much, it had atmosphere, reason and understanding. I knew all three characters. GO read this brothas and sistas again. The ending line was a cliff hanger for sure. Look out for this kat.​
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    Week 14 Predictions


    Ink vs Coup
    Good luck ink!!!! I have a feeling you are going to capitalize on some poetic justice! A mystery to me...and bring a shell shock. I bought a helmet though ;P. This will be a great match. Much respect to Ink and his abilities to write!!!!
    Ink strengths: Balance of wit, poetic concepts that run throughout a written both interchangeably that builds and elements of flash fiction. Ties in all aspects to bring complete pictures/ideas together
    INK weakness: takes safe approaches that can limit a more organic way to highlight said strengths. (still need to see more of his work. Assessment incomplete).


    Patrown vs Shadowarriorfs vs Breath
    All three kats can take this. Pat, if he come out like last week he go this. Shad ? Kat is established and mechanical, he has long ago figured out a formula that works for him. How about Breathless ? Dude comes intelligent, how fresh is the wisdom this week ? WHO will win ? Pat is hungry, Shad is relaxed and Breath is spaced out half the time. Pat got this.
    Pat's strength: energy in his flow that is linked by brilliant way to say things. Passion and a hard nock style that is can't be taught
    pat's weakness: The longer the story, the more incomplete he gets and losses focus and thus the reader.
    Shad's strength: experience and a consistent and constant quality of work...a true craftsman
    Shads' weakness: So consistent you can expect what he will bring, and how he will write. Often lacks poetic flair in place for straight up A-Z story telling. A focus on women that are really rehashes of the same story over and over. A English sense of humor (<3 shad)
    Breathless strength: Deep thought and emotion provoking writer. A thinker of the analytical variety. Odd flow, that is unique to him and a ability to make long sentences rhyme.
    Breath weakness: Lack of creativity on the fiction story telling side. Too one dimensional and losses opportunity due to his inner thinking self.
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    Best/worst lines of Week 13


    We got some dope talent here brothas and sistas!
    Here I'll be choosing baised on how the lines flow, and not necessarily on the wisdom or on the content of the passages. But some lines will be because of remarkable concept or image. So it's random and it's not. PM me for clarity. Basically, it's what I liked and what I did not like.
    I encourage all readers to discuss and break down and analyze the best and worst. Discuss what worked and what did not: flow, mechanics, structure, ideal and delivery and more!


    Shadow:
    Best:
    Mom screamed for mercy as more soldiers gathered
    They tossed dad around his face beaten and battered

    and
    So I rose to power, reigning over North Korea?s land
    Changed my name to Kim and marched on the sand-

    Worst:
    Their guns silent as only the shells make a sound
    The soldiers left, leaving behind their South Korean flag



    Theinkwell
    Best:
    This isn?t how it seems - I swear I?m not that kind of guy
    My heart is on my sleeve - everyone wrings it out to die
    Violin used to sing - now it weeps when I play it?s spine
    The resin rises in a swirl that tries to choke me of my life
    Never ruffled feathers, always one to brush along the grain
    But now I?m sticking out like a splinter, yearning for a taste

    worst:
    I got strangers asking me to sign their books next to my picture
    They don?t even go to my school? so I refuse to signature



    Breathless
    Best:
    breathe the ether, rise above the previous overseers and lead the grievers
    I'd be the Guy, but, I don't seek believers...

    and
    God didn't want me to figure all this out through human logic
    but I'd rather be a profit for the planet than one God sent.

    worst:
    it's the heightened sense that lets us cry and smile at the same time
    the rights of death in spite of lessons left by our ancestors under flame light
    but if its me you wanna blame, fine... I'll see you on the wayside




    Patrown
    Best:
    Finish soon, we'll hop scotch on tiles of the roof.
    I'll get high and shuffle in my crocodile boots
    .
    and
    I'm a guy made for museums, a shoreline walker,
    you still look at me as just a chore time stalker.
    that's no way to show love to your kind father.
    My only daughter, I've taught you better manners,
    every bit of wasted food sets a table's standard.

    Wrost:
    I got nothing.


    Coup
    What I liked:
    Boy's all fading soon, zero pharmaceuticals
    Doe in season, Bambi's dope ?... Dear: magical,
    Oxygen is now premium, laughin' over chemicals
    Seeing is believing, I see dreams being physical

    What I thought meh:
    On it again, down periscope chasing rabbit holes
    Wow, Alice is my miracle...lickin' em' pink popsicles

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    ***INTERVIEW****


    Featured writer this week 14. The one, the only and the passionate PATROWN!
    Pat, thanks for agreeing to do an interview for this week's magazine,
    much respect nigga and props for taking some time out yo day for the
    enjoyment of the RSTL community:

    1. Let's kick this off by having you tell us about yourself. What
    would you like the RSTL to know about you that we don't know already ?


    Hm. Writing's very important to me. I do give a fuck and appreciate
    the harshest of criticism.
    It will be where my career lies, being one of the only things I'm good
    at that does not involve massive amounts of movement. My left foot is
    a mess. So this keeps me busy, and after getting the hang of it the
    time put into feedback will be returned tenfold with entertainment.

    2. How long have you been writing ? How did you discover that you
    enjoyed to write and that you had some talent ?


    I've dabbled with it here and there, the first time I was 11. Found
    some website called lyrical warfare..think I battled one person, didn't
    listen to hip hop that much. I hadn't heard anything like what I
    listened to today. Midway through a class incorporating critical
    thinking in essay
    writing was the first time I was proud of a creation. Since then,
    people have told
    me I am okay off the top. So it motivated me to continue and write better songs,
    for the accomplishment.

    3. We all have some idea and we all have a 'philosophy' of what good
    writing is and what it is not. Being that it is somewhat subjective,
    what is good writing to you ? What do you look for in other works and
    what do you look to do in your own work ?


    To me, good writing captivates an audience. That's relatively new to
    me as far as poetry goes. In other works, captivating imagery and
    honest story telling always
    keep my interest. The author writing with an invisible hand holds my
    attention the best. Rhyme by itself, even if explaining a situation,
    is not as interesting as the events of the situation unfolding.
    In my own work I want to be able to tell a simple, captivating story.
    I hope to get the art down and drop some thought on some issues I
    have sitting on the back burner when the time comes.

    4. Conversely, what do you consider bad habits in writing: flow,
    structure or even story telling ? What makes a piece not work ?


    Using the same rhyme scheme for too long makes a piece less appealing
    to me. Too much rhyme,
    too many very long syllable counts, I can't really speak for anyone
    else, but I know I'm bothered by changes in point of view when
    evaluating a piece entirely. It's very hard to do.
    Also: trying too hard.

    5. You seem to be a pretty humble kat and are welcomed across all RM
    and yet, are a relative new comer to the scene here. Being as it
    may, what writers here at the whole of RM.com stand out to you, past
    or present ? Why ?


    J. keep. aka pain, drops some of the freshest lyrics I've ever read on
    cypher threads.
    "Bar nigga" retired and I don't know how long cypher threads stay up,
    so check him out before or until the end of March 2012. "Hibe the
    god" is on his own level in audio emcee hook ups. Many other good
    heads are from AEH, like J Anthony and Dizeazed. They sound good and
    have good content. I'm going with Hibernation as my #1 though. Your
    well rounded style has a shine to it Coup. Every couple days I read
    something of yours in the poetry realm. I only made a user name on
    rapmusic.com because I read your work there. Every single week,
    Breathless is smart as fuck in the RSTL. His pieces are often deep,
    and I haven't read as many relevant points come out of a single person
    yet. I've read quite a few but.. still. Props to Breathless for being
    on point consistently improving.

    6. Specially, who stands out to you in the RSTL past or present and why ?

    Kuja is really good, but it's more than just the plots I enjoy. I
    admire his ability to paint a believable picture with ease. I just
    couldn't picture Kuja having a problem telling a good story. Not on
    his worst day.

    7. Getting a little deeper, who needs to improve most ? How would you
    rank the talent pool ? The standings are thin so you can draw on every
    RSTL writer to have competed recently. What's your insights to share ?


    Pat, I lost the answer to this or I never recieved it. Answer this question in the thread bruh!

    8. So you were busted for selling dope ? Dawg, clear your name. What went down ?

    I was busted with two ounces of herb, and a colorful blood sample I
    gave at the police station. Can't clear my name, with my record I'll
    probably do about 90-180 days. Sentencing is set for June. wish me
    luck.

    9. Have you learned or are you a repeat offender ?

    I'm already a repeat offender. I learned don't drive faded. especially
    if you're stocked up.

    10. Yo, I'm gone put you on the spot. Could you flip these words into
    a 4 bar flow: spider, scissors, cut, sing, pepper and lesson.


    i walk in a spider web's sea of salt and pepper hatchlings
    soon grimly snacking, each leaving their mark with a sting
    marking with teeth bites, cleaving choices of skin.
    they're all taught a lesson, my 12 gauge destroying grins

    11. When you ain't writing or spitin' as an MC, what is Pat doing on
    his free time ?


    If that's not free time I don't have too much of it man. Whenever I
    can, get out in the world to support my boys in the drum n bass and
    dubstep scenes occasionally. Besides that, I just work and chill with
    my people at home occasionally most times. I just fixed my mountain
    bike, and am going bungee jumping/hiking again soon.

    12. Wheres the world headed ?

    We aren't adequately funding scientific advancements to reverse the
    atmosphere's contamination. Humanity's only temporary until we have
    the capability to manufacture renewable resources and continue
    spreading out from space stations.

    13. Where are you going to end up in 10 years ? Prison and death don't
    count as an answer.


    I'm comfortable where I am, but wouldn't mind moving to Oregon. I hope
    in all seriousness to be in exactly the same place I am now. Only as a
    co-owner of the business I work for.

    14. Who has the biggest ego at RM.com ?

    I would have to say .. wow that's hard.
    Dethstryque. but realistically, I'm not going to argue with a thing he says.
    I've spoken with him a lot, and he's one of the most down to Earth
    personalities I've encountered, but when he writes.. it's,"I, kind
    sir, am the master of your universe. Bow to me, Dethstryque, the all
    powerful." He's also the realest cat you'll ever talk to. I'm a better
    person having spoken to him.

    15. Who is the most underrated writer at RM.com ?

    Ink. I don't think he goes all out every week. If he got mad at me, I
    would not want to VS him. It would mean a loss. I have the feeling
    he's a beast and prefers to go all out on occasion
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    Interview continued




    16. What could you teach the world, if they listened to you ?

    Stop breeding.
    Stop eating french fries and meat + cheese within 5 hours of each
    other. (colon cancer/carcinogenic enzymes produced)

    17. Do you consider the talent pool here to be amateurs or beyond that
    ? How could writers here looking to break into the industry get past
    the barrier that hold some many aspiring writers back ?


    To directly answer your question, making quick money's in the
    non-fiction business. The key is writing the right book at the right
    time. Market the books premise appropriately. Adjust to your target
    market. An author who is not just on top of current events, but
    predicting current events can play world News like a stock market. Pay
    search providers appropriately, write relevant novel's and approach
    publishers after your idea is explained and some ends are buttoned up.

    18. In a few words describe Shadows writing

    developed characters, predictably unpredictable, entertaining,
    "shadows writing..."

    18 In a few words describe Theinkwells writing

    amusing, heavy on plot, "lol", dive bombs vacation homes, a topical g.o.a.t.

    19. In a few words describe Breathless writing

    epic, playfully serious, thought provoking, ambiguous

    20. Last question...What do you think about our match week 12 ? As
    we had talked and joked about it earlier we both came out surprised
    how it ended....what does that teach or reveal to one about writing:
    as in length, structure, tone, placement and syllable count in a verse
    ? Or is this something to build on or just shake off ?


    http://board.rapmusic.com/rapmusic-...1-vs-8-coup-detat-0-0-vs-9-patrown-0-0-a.html
    It was a lesson learned.. People want to be entertained. I'm switching
    in research for pop corn, some character development and twists. You
    kicked my ass with 16 bars, i dropped in the low 40's. that's
    humbling.

    Next week: the one, the only THEINKWELL.
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  7. Coup d'état

    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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    shad, can you space out the inteview ?
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    I like how you wrote this out.

    but that quote was phenoominal.

    (sending PM with further unwanted explanation and a thank you

    possibly a cookie.)
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    great mag, coup! possibly one of the most thorough i've seen in a while.

    that blue ballz reference was completely lost on me. but i'm not sure i want to know

    great interview too! pat is a model example of how everyone should approach this craft. humble and seeking growth. it's no coincidence he has exploded in skill these past few weeks

    pat: in response to your last comment.. it really depends. read Bents stuff, his is nearly all historical or involved some research.. No reason you can't have it all though =p
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  10. Coup d'état

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    ink the blue ballz is that tar heels work out you do...

    in the article the basketball team had blue medicine balls to do the 400 ball exercise
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    oh yeah! duh.. haha
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  12. Coup d'état

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    lol

    Ok, so I'm going to do the interview for the mag next week, and it would be cool if someone else did the recaps, predictions, etc...so that it keeps changing and is fresh...who's going to step up ?

    *looks at pat and ink*
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    *fixed*

    Ink can't count to 20 so i don't know how that interview will go :p

    Next week i'm in Fl all week so i'll be posted the topics super early and PMing my verse to t.a.c. to post when threads are created. I won't have my laptop to post. Coup, get out T.a.C to post the mag next week
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    I can do predicts =]

    Shad. 1...2...3...4...5..6..7..8..9..10....10-1...10-2...10-3..10-4...10-5...10-6...10-7...108-...10-9....10-10!
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  15. Coup d'état

    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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    alright shad...

    you in fl again ? where at this time ?
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    I wasn't in FL last time, i was in SF. I'll be in Orlando

    Awww Ink, you are all grown up
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  17. Coup d'état

    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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    shad, if you get near tampa call me up

    734 353 2296

    I'll cook ya some mean hamburgers
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    Tampa has a pretty beast paintball team
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    Shads style is to tell you hes in your neighborhood after hes gone...that shit head.
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