[Mag] RSTL Magazine - Week 32 Edition

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    RSTL Magazine Week 32

    Intro
    Recap
    Battle of the Week
    No-Show Shine
    Matchups
    Predictions
    Babe of the Week
    Video of the Week
    T.a.C-tical Interviews
    Grinds My Gears
    Conclusion


    1. Intro


    Welcome back everyone to the next edition of the RSTL Magazine. A disappointing week with a few no shows but people seem to be improving and that’s what matters the most.
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    2. Recap

    This week we had three no shows, let’s see how the matches ended up this week.

    Atreyu – I thought this piece was well written and had great mechanics. The flow was good, the rhymes were nice and the imagery was nice. For the topic you picked, you did well with telling a good story that was interesting as well as entertaining. Next week, I think you should go into more depth with your story. Try to paint a more vivid picture of how things develop. Nicely done here.

    Memento – I thought this was a well-told story. You started this off in a very poetic fashion with a lot of vivid imagery, nicely used wordplay and good rhymes. I notice that as the story progressed, the style of your writing did as well. Section after section you slowly lowered in quality from the first stanza, which I found very interesting. Correct me if I’m wrong but I gathered that this was a purposefully done to portray the writer’s mind being over taken by the use of ‘jack’. If this is the case, this was a hell of a nice job with that. I look forward to your next piece.

    Noble Soldier – This was a very nice story. I thought that besides a couple of grammar errors, this was nicely delivered. You told a very, real life type of story that can touch hearts when read. It had a very poetic feel to it with nice internal rhyming. I think you should work on your grammar and perhaps try shortening your lines a little to help your flow. Overall, a very enjoyable read and I look forward to your next match.

    Killaeffect vs. oNeiRic – This match was evenly matched and both competitors improved greatly from the previous week. Last week Killa flooded his verse with ‘-‘ in between his rhymes and this week he took our advice. He removed them and his verse improved. He still needs to work on his spelling and grammar but still an improvement. oNe had a nice story that was hard to follow at times. This hurt your verse in some reader’s minds because they constantly had to re-read lines to get your point. Try simplifying your verse a little bit more. Overall both guys came evenly and had some things they needed to improve and they finished in a 2-2 tie.

    Urizen vs. Deadeyez – This match was interesting to read. Dead is coming of a loss last week where his verse was filled with misused words and this week, he slowed them down drastically. He had moments where he felt the need to re-iterate obvious observations. This caused his story to come across as slow. Urizen wrote a good story that had good progression and good rhyming. Overall, this match was interesting and I had high hopes for dead who seemed to have more vivid story but his spelling and delivery hindered his story giving Urizen a 3-1 victory.

    ShadowWarriorfs vs. Got Life? – This week Shadow had to take on one of the best writers in this league. Both writers are coming off victories and met in the number 1 contenders match. Shadow wrote a very nice story that had good development and nice imagery while GL? wrote a very in depth, poetic story about something very dear to him. This match-up was surprisingly even according to the readers. Shadow had issue with his flow(like usual) and his wording could be worked on a little bit. Unfortunately, GL removed his verse so I couldn’t give my personal opinion in the magazine(I read it earlier in the week). Shadow shutout GL 4-0.

    T.a.C. vs. Pain – In this weeks championship match, T.a.C defended his title against Pain. T.a.C has been climbing the ranks since he has been in the league and has developed himself as a humorous storyteller. This, however, didn’t phase pain. He wrote a verse that flowed nicely with nice rhyming and good imagery. He had a minor grammar error but that didn’t degrade his verse any. T.a.C wrote a verse, once again to be humorous, about his homosexual fantasy. The issue with this is that he seemed to force it. Instead of being subtle about it, he wanted to punch it into the reader’s heads. This hurt his verse and caused Pain to shut him out with a 5-0 victory.

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    3. Battle of the Week

    Pain

    The Pen Is Mightier Than The Sword...

    At eighteen, he had achieved all of his dreams,
    Followed the schemes laid by Oliver's sheep,
    Orphans with a mind to lay it on the line through
    every kind of bullshit, that life can supplies you,
    He tried to fly through the cries, his mind moved,
    Onto to vengence, true, the visions of crime grew,
    And within a time, dude knew it was time to choose,
    Between life or a vibrant view,
    Now this guy's in blue, disguised as a hybrid fool,
    A cross between lies and pride unglued,
    So he cruises with a carload of thugs for minute,
    Wonderin' if it is the last time his blood is within him,
    He's just player in a game, a pawn to a king,
    His cause is long-gone, he swallowed the sting,
    And there's another player rollin' right up beside 'em,
    Uniform red and black, throwin' liners with side arms,
    Another mind gone, a sigh, yawn,
    Cuz although the young die strong, they die dumb, a life lost,
    All for being corrupted by pride,
    It should come as no surprise that a gun took his life,
    Slumped in the car, blood from his heart,
    Leaking everywhere, holes plugged by the scars,
    Another nameless story, another dateless day,
    In the life on the road most know as gangsta way...

    ...He was never nothin' other than intelligently gifted,
    Magnificent with written scripts of telling 'bout what's in him,
    True expression, lessons were taught based on his poems,
    A guy everyone liked, but hated and loathed,
    He always had it easy, had money to spend,
    Had friends that would always have some money to lend,
    Never has he said, fate was funny, perplexed,
    Because of the ironies found when fucking distressed,
    Instead, he had a safe life, and found fun in a pen,
    And he wrote theme-less stories about nothing at best,
    But he made a lot of envy with emptiness to blame,
    The emptiness in his writing that the senseless have praised,
    And since he never once threw a punch or a kick,
    He was quite conspicuous to get snuffed for his shit,
    And one night, a thug and his click, we're walkin' out of a club
    with a pissed state of mind runnin' their lips,
    They spotted the man walkin' home by himself,
    They followed him to a place where no one could help,
    They attacked him, jumped on his face, and stabbed him in the back,
    He was an easy target marchin' the back-way to this, in fact,
    Simply walkin' back home, after signing a contract,
    To write three novels; beyond that, he'll call back,
    If he only had a spine, and walked with some weight,
    That poor son of a bitch would be walkin' today,
    Instead you can visit 'em, just walk through the gate,
    Third stone on the left, another pawn in the game...

    ...They say the pen's mightier than the sword, and I don't see it,
    Cuz men use rifles at war, and you can't read it,
    There ain't no book that can stop a bullet from hittin' you,
    There ain't no pen that can kill a person like pistols do,
    But if you wanna live the longest, at least stay on their minds,
    Then the pen is your friend, cuz even after you die,
    You will live on through songs, poems, novels, and quotes,
    If you died by the gun too, then they'll probably take note,
    I give both their due, they have no problem sharing souls,
    The pen's mightier than the sword, but I carry both....​

    Vs

    T.a.C

    Narrator = Shadow

    Followed my passion, thought I had got my dream job
    Quit at the laundro-mat, no longer had to sling cloths
    No more dealing with people, no longer having a mean boss
    Still dealing with assholes, but not what you think, dawg
    I need to come across some currency, quick its an emergency
    Always had a big dick, chicks constantly saying ‘you’re hurtin me’
    Worrying with a sense of urgency, signed the papers hurriedly
    Getting paid to have sex, definitely is what was luring me
    Burning pee wasn’t deterring, see, I reached financial woes
    Fell pretty deep into debt with some substantial foes
    Plus I had to tap those hoes, that look like Axl Rose
    Who looked like Kim Kardash yo after those packs of coke
    At the meeting, they were on some ‘sign the line’ shit
    And yeah, I was excited so I didn’t catch the fine print
    So I show up for the filming, enter the movie studio
    See this cutie hoe, I approach and ask how shes doing, yo
    She looked at me and said “You’ll be doing me, Rubio”
    I said, “My names Shadow” “Oh, you’ll be booming Julio”
    “What?!, Peace, I need to find this bastard director”
    Approached him and sat him down like his master to lecture
    “I’m fuckin Julio?” He said “No, your actor Hector”
    “I want that fine bitch I’d rather have to sex her?”
    I’m straight like a vector, I have to confess a bereavement
    He said “You signed the contract, we possess an agreement
    Now stop bitching and get up and finesse his behemoth
    This is big money, do you really have intent to leave it?”
    I’ll spare the details for all you straight guys
    But today I became gay in the late night
    He was close, we laid tight, while I prayed I’m
    forgivin, I had a look on my face like…

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    Walkin around pissed, just like a gloomy fuck
    Director said It wouldn’t be seen, that my movie sucked
    Got my paycheck, it came out to a nice stack
    Stopped at the store to buy my ass an ice pack
    Thinking “I just sucked a dick, shit I’m queer”
    The fact I enjoyed it when he licked my ear
    He pricked my rear, I enjoyed this right here
    The fact I didn’t hate it is the cause of this, my fear
    I got major stoned, surprised I made it home
    Had some Chinese food left over, which I ate alone
    I had a fortune cookie, grabbed it and cracked it
    That’s when I saw the message left in that bitch…

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    4. No Show Shine

    Memento

    A lullaby, a hug goodbye and one last kiss I'm numb inside
    I chug my pint, it tugs my spine; strumming guitars drug my mind
    My stomach slides as humming flies rummage in my slum, I cry
    And rub my eyes to nudge my pride, but it subsides: my luck's expired
    Sicker thoughts of mind, but not from mine; more of the exotic kind
    Feeling drought, a sign of short supply; sniff the smell of rotten grime
    So I down shots on rocks, as hot as fire; my throat tastes like lava burns
    But I won't waste a drop, but every dime and penny spent Jack earns
    Because Jack spares the back hurt, we prop each other up to last turns
    With my hand on Jack's shoulder, he won't roll over and just dry up
    Jack in my hand I'm covered, better than being sober or the shy one
    Except that alcoholism is something that I'm more likely to die from

    This is Alcohell, an underworld broken into whenever we crack a bottle
    We have carousels to convey ourselves, each time we pull the throttle
    Welcome you with a splash, showering shelves and pleasuring in the night
    Everyone's measuring our delight, and we'll hang you over for your plight

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    A steady drumbeat, this is club heat and one last dance with ugly
    But my eyes say lovely, she'll fuck me; she'll suck my dick it's what I need
    She's sugar sweet, and rubbing on me; luckily she's just as drunk as me
    'Look at me I got something to see,' I say, believing she's a fucking freak
    We 'bout to get down and dirty now, was a purrty gal when flirting, wow
    Am I seeing things? I'm hearing sounds, it feels so good inside her mouth
    But this bitch got an Adam's apple... oh.... holy... cow..........................!

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    5. Matchups


    CHAMPIONSHIP
    C. .:pain:. 3-0
    2. ShadowWarriorfs 14-12

    Predictions – This week for the championship, Pain defends his newly won gold against Shadow. Shadow has been climbing the charts and Pain does not plan on giving up the belt. This week, Pain shuts out Shadow, 3-0.

    CONTENDERSHIP
    3. -Atreyu- 4-0
    4. NOBLE SOLDIER 5-2

    Predictions – Both writers are coming off no show wins and are great writers in the league. Noble and Atreyu have very different styles of writing and this could come down to which style the readers prefer. I think Noble will win this 3-2.

    5. Urizen 4-3
    6. oNeiRiC 1-2

    Predictions – These two writers face each other again for a chance at the contendership. Last time Urizen was the victory but since then oNe has improved and is looking to upset Urizen. Unfortunately, I don’t think Urizen will lose this week. Urizen wins 3-0.

    7. killaeffect 1-1
    8. Memento 1-0

    Predictions – Killa has been improving, which is great since his first verse in the league wasn’t very good. This week he looks to upset Memento who is a very good, creative writer. Killa’s only chance of winning this week is to proof read his story and tell a more developed story. I see him improving but I think Memento wins 4-0.

    9. Link Gash 3-0
    10. iCon. 1-0

    Predictions – This will be an interesting match-up. I don’t know who icon is but Link is a good writer. This match-up will depend on iCon’s ability. He is going to need to come hard in order to beat Link. I will give this match up to Link since I don’t know icon.

    11. T.a.C 7-5
    12. Soull 0-0

    Predictions – T.a.C is coming off a loss and losing his title to Pain. He now face Soull who is back in the league and looks to be motivated and looking to beat T.a.C. This will be a good match-up to read since both are talented but I think Soull will pull the upset over T.a.C in a 3-2 victory.

    13. KNoXvillE 0-0
    14. Master Peace 0-0

    Predictions – I’m not entirely sure who these guys are as far as writers are concerned. I believe this match-up will end up with both writers no showing.
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    6. Babe of the Week

    Brandy Grace
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    7. Video Of The Week

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    8. T.a.C-tical Interviews – This week, T.a.C interviewed Shadow. Let’s see how that went

    T.a.C: Where did you get the named ShadowWarriorfs?

    Shadow: I've been through a lot in my life, made me feel like a warrior the way i always bounced back. However i wasn't a noticeable person, i was there but yet not(shadow). FS does not mean free socks lol..means forever strong...for a friend that died a few years back.

    T.a.C: Tell us a few things about you now one knows

    Shadow: i assume you mean no one knows...ummm i'd have to say my patience and non vulgar nature outside of RM

    T.a.C: Who is your favorite artist?

    Shadow: Bone Thugs...i grew up on them

    T.a.C: Who inspires you most to write?

    Shadow: Nowadays, my inspiration comes from my desire to improve and pass time. In the past, my inspiration was always surviving

    T.a.C: What do you think was the best album to drop this year?

    Shadow: I haven't really bought a new album this year....I bought, T.I, Eminem and J. Holiday...Eminem was clearly the best of the three

    T.a.C: What is your favorite album of all time?

    Shadow: Hmm..tough one here...i'd have to say Bone Thugs Art Of War or E. 1999 Eternal for rap, 8701 - Usher for R&B..rock varies

    T.a.C: What genre are you embarrassed to admit you like?

    Shadow: hmmm...i'd have to say none...if i like a genre i'm not embarrassed about it

    T.a.C: What genre do you straight up hate?

    Shadow: Mostly country, unless it has an R&B swag to it

    T.a.C: Let us know about your history in the league

    Shadow: Pretty much started a couple months back, didn't do much topical writing before that, been climbing the charts ever since.

    T.a.C: What is your opinion on the league?

    Shadow: The league has improved...i'm glad some people can take some good criticism and use it to improve. The mods are an improvement and the league is fun

    T.a.C: What are some areas you think we can improve?

    Shadow: Voting..i wish people would put people's feelings aside and just say what's on their minds. people can't improve if we sugar coat everything

    T.a.C: Who do you think are the top 3 writers in the league?

    Shadow: Currently?

    Pain
    Memento
    Noble

    T.a.C: Who do you think is the best voter?

    Shadow: Got Life? easy...

    T.a.C: Who do you wanna face the most?

    Shadow: Memento, Nom or Nu'Maan

    T.a.C: What do you think about your win over GL? What do you think about him signing out in result to it?

    Shadow: lol i knew this was coming, I feel great about it honestly. Beating the best writer in the league, who wouldn't feel great about it. I'm glad the readers liked my verse soo much. I was going to look at GL?'s verse in depth and see how i would've voted if i was an outsider but he removed it soo i can't say much. But his verse was very nice and poetic but voting is a matter of reader preference so hey, wut can you do

    What i think about him signing out? nothing really, he told everyone what he'd do if he lost and he did just that. Its not my fault really. I wish he hadn't because i liked reading his stories.

    T.a.C: What do you think about me posting your biography last week?

    Shadow: lol I like your bravery and your style of writing and you've improved alot..i think you would've flamed me more(no homo) if you were more subtle about it

    T.a.C: Anything you really wanna say?

    Shadow: Just i'm proud of alot of the writers in the league and i'm glad alot of the newer guys are taking the criticism and use it to improve. Writers such as oNeiRiC, Urizen, Killa, and i would say dead but he signed out...likely mad that i still thought his verse wasn't as good as hist first and likely didn't agree with the areas i felt he needed to improve in....meh to him then

    T.a.C: And finally, a quote you live by?

    Shadow: Well it changed randomly but today it has to be

    "It takes all of us to change the world but just one to start..."
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    9. Grinds My Gears – You know what really grinds my gears, jewelry commercials. Seriously, who writes these things? I don’t know many guys who will actually lead his girlfriend or wife out side into the cold to give her a necklace. All this kind of thing does it give women the impression that all men are required to do this in order to make the mood more romantic. So spending 2 grand on a necklace isn’t enough to make the mood special, I have to go and stand in the cold just because a commercial set an unrealistic example that men ‘should’ follow. That is pure garbage and this is what really grinds my gears.


    10. Conclusion – Overall a good week this week and I’m proud of everyone improving in their writing and voting. Nom and Nu’Maan need to sign back into the league so they can get beat :eek:. Good luck to everyone this week
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    nice mag
    and I love the fact that Im still a new writer
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    lol @ you being a new writer, you've had well over 50 battles.

    e:/ i'll write a verse tomorrow and pm it to shadow to be swapped out with any no-show.
    should make for some frustration.
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    new to me :-D

    over 50 battles? really? interesting
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    yeah, he's also MrMister combine the two, and yeah he's somewhere around 25-25.

    one of the more accomplished non-english speaking writers.
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    i think i remember a MrMister somewhere...makes sense now
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    yeah I think Im near 50 battles in total

    and GL thnx for that
    preciate it

    Ima try to up my game the coming weeks

    havent done that in a while
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    you're honestly one of the more creative writers, you just struggle with developing your mechanics because English is not a language you're overly comfortable with. As your use of the language expands and develops, so grows your writing.
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  16. nom de plume.

    nom de plume. rumbrave.

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  17. .:Pain:.

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    Pretty much hit it on the head.

    Still don't know how SW won, but hey, that's why we have these matches...
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    well the 3 people that voted against me have the equivalent reading comprehension of someone that has possibly acquired a GED by the skin of their teeth, and memento admitted he himself had no idea who to really vote for.

    so yeah, poor quality of writers in the league = shit verses beating far better ones.
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    lol just to comment on that one
    I got my Bachelors from Davenport University
    which is in MI

    so Im far past my GED homey
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  20. Got Life?

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    and yet you failed to notice that my critique was towards your reading comprehension...which kind of goes hand in hand with my critique. Good times homie.
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