Ma Gift!

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  1. VerbalWeaponz

    VerbalWeaponz Unholy-Syndicate

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    life for me is hardly eva easy to wake up happily..
    sad to see maself wish death on ma own life of missery..
    ma history is kinda steep bleek of happy memories..
    tha times of turmoil dig deep into ma souls soil..
    killin ma inner self tremendously..
    some say its cuz theres no faith in ma heart..
    since i dont beleive in a god an maybe i should start..
    but me in that predicament..
    would prolly tear ma character apart..
    so i absorb tha pain an sacrifice ma innocence..
    walking thru tha rain of ma emotions..
    as i remenis of tha times before i lost maself in the dark..
    im losin maself..wonderin if its becuz of ma own ignorance..

    i live a life...lost in a silence..
    absorbin tha pain..as im surrounded by violence..
    i feel as if..from within that im dyin..
    to maself i keep lyin when i say im strong enuff to make..
    cuz inside im continuesly cryin..
    ma soft side cringed with fear in me...always hidin..
    if only that light was shinin on me..to give me a lift..
    the voice of one...who i consider a gift..


    constantly dealin with trouble wit fo's..
    unable to keep on ma toes..
    ma tree of woe planted in tha deep holes in ma heart..
    rooted deep in ma soul..sprouts ma sorrows..
    ma greifs..ma anger all in which generatin this heat..
    that creates this posion killin me..with its venomosity..
    i become weaker in every aspect of life..
    feeble spirit makes me drop to ma knees..
    sufferin pains worse than ma heart..
    bein peirced wit a jagged edged knife..
    lookin for that guiding light in tha night..
    tha one that always can be found beside me..
    always eager to give ma spirits a lift..
    the light beside me...some1 who i consider a gift..


    live a life...lost in a silence..
    absorbin tha pain..as im surrounded by violence..
    i feel as if..from within that im dyin..
    to maself i keep lyin when i say im strong enuff to make..
    cuz inside im continuesly cryin..
    ma soft side cringed with fear in me...always hidin..
    if only that light was shinin on me..to give me a lift..
    the voice of one...who i consider a gift..

    thru ma struggles an ma pains..
    your relationship wit me as remained the same..
    ma love for you is strong..
    a bond no one can harm or eva change..
    u've umbrella'd ma soul in tha cold walks in tha rain..
    talked to me softly an calmly to ease ma spirits..
    wheneva i was slippin off ma chains..
    if it wasnt for you..
    ma blood wouldnt still be runnin thru ma veins..
    thru ma agony of self defeat..
    a light shines on me when i hear ur name..
    for some1 like me ur all that i need..
    more than wut i deserve to get..
    a love from a friend unbreakble to the end..
    ma gift....


    tell me what ya think.......

    Verbal
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  2. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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    i know you wanted to write it just as you'd say it , but i had a hard time with all the ma and maselfs- lol- i'm from florida and already have trouble reading haha ... but once past that - this was a really nice poem and i liked it
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  3. Kayser Soze

    Kayser Soze Cigmas worst nightmare

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    It sucks for me to wake up in the morn as well my brother, but thats why i smoke weed.

    Nice piece though, I can relate lately.
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  4. VerbalWeaponz

    VerbalWeaponz Unholy-Syndicate

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    thanks.....uppin......
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  5. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    i completly agree...not a bad piece at all but i think the mas and shit took away from the poem....keep it up
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  6. VerbalWeaponz

    VerbalWeaponz Unholy-Syndicate

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    iight ill keep that in mind next time....thanx uppin
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  7. 49th Prophet

    49th Prophet Dark Magic Inferno

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    I too agree with the ma's n shit takin away from the piece, dont get me wrong though it was still a dope drop and I really liked it, keep it coming

    peace
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  8. VerbalWeaponz

    VerbalWeaponz Unholy-Syndicate

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    ight....thanx uppin

    Verbal
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    .........................
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  11. VerbalWeaponz

    VerbalWeaponz Unholy-Syndicate

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    critiques plz.......

    Verbal
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  12. MADDRAPPER

    MADDRAPPER I own you motherfuckers..

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    hey this was nice for real yo be easy on the mas's well let mej drop a little something up in here

    Look most times post rhymes, that toast spines and mislead
    A host of minds, leave cats with the holyghost blind, twist creed
    My emotions and behavior stir up oceans major, waves be high
    Next summer want a complex hummer fourwheel drive on the fly
    Twenties on the rim with plenty trim with an automatic locking system
    Drive cause static by rocking wisdom cats jealous come with shocking criticism
    Leather interior make me clever and superior, never inferior
    To cats, down the road with a brown load of chick ill like diptheria
    Their thighs sweaty, pies ready eyes like a mashete dangerous love
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  13. VerbalWeaponz

    VerbalWeaponz Unholy-Syndicate

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    ayo no beef, but i asked u once already n' it should b tha only time that i ask u..dont post shit in ma threads unless its a vote or critiques...no wack ass verses.....pz

    Verbal
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  14. MADDRAPPER

    MADDRAPPER I own you motherfuckers..

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    do legit writing as life emit lightning that's frightening hard to awake happy and take a nappy look into my future and rightly twist to success instead wish death
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  15. Dough Jordan

    Dough Jordan Sky's No Limit Of Mine...

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    lmao @ crapper starting trouble again
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  16. VerbalWeaponz

    VerbalWeaponz Unholy-Syndicate

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    kid jus lucky he dont no me in real life...otherwise he would b fucked......lol....quit it madrapper.....seriously..u have no life thats y u got so many damn post.....pz

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  17. VerbalWeaponz

    VerbalWeaponz Unholy-Syndicate

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    uppity up dis shiz...

    Verbal
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    VerbalWeaponz Unholy-Syndicate

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  20. VerbalWeaponz

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    uppin...ill rply to urs if ya drop links........pz

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