Lyrical Sorcery V.S. Brit Boi Gee V.S. Anaphora

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  1. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    We have 5 people left and there was going to have to be a match with 3 people in it. There only be one winner in this match.


    Here's what you'll be doing...

    Time
    dream
    death
    journey
    sex
    war
    suicide
    racisim
    culture
    misery

    You will pick one of those words and write a poem. The poem must have an intro and an outro. The intro and outro must be in cinquain form (5 line poem) using the word you picked . For those of you that do not know how to write a cinquain i'll show you....



    Line1: one word to name the subject tree
    Line 2: two words to describe it.... tall, green
    Line 3: three action words about it... growing, reaching, standing
    Line 4: a four or five word phrase describing the subject (a thought, not a complete sentence) a witness to the past

    Line 5: one word that means the same thing as the first word, or a word that sums it all up. future

    Tree
    tall, green
    growing, reaching, standing
    a witness to the past
    future



    Here goes another example...

    Snowman
    Chubby, cheerful
    Waiting, grinning, winking
    Icy weather keeps him smiling
    Frosty


    Simple.....




    Sign in by Saturday, June 12! Verses due Monday, June 14th!!

    Voting due Friday, June 18th
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  2. I will try and get something done for this over the next few days
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  3. Anaphora

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    do you want the cinquains to be the same or different? line limit? I'll write something for it just let me know the specs.
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  4. MANchyld

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    that's different... this is like creative summer school now

    I'm in it
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  5. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    The cinquain has to be the same word you chose, for the intro and outro.
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  6. Anaphora

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    The original word yes, but do the cinquains have to be exactly the same? Or can you change the middle part around...
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  7. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    No they must be different. And there is no middle cinquain, if that's what you are saying. It's only 2 cinquains you are writing.

    Intro (Cinquain)

    Middle (the poem from the word you pick)

    Outro (Cinquain)
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  8. Anaphora

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    Haha, no I mean, can the cinquains be different, like... say you picked dream...
    could it be
    suicide
    end, loss
    stretching, stopping, possessing
    blah blah blah blah
    finshed.

    then the ending be
    suicide
    commonplace, blah
    blah blah blah
    blah blah blah blah
    beginning...

    ya know what I'm saying?
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  9. MANchyld

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    all gravy...

    I'm doing mine on Death
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  10. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    yes anaphora it can be different
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  11. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    See man that shit is harder to understand then you thought... And you said it was simple...lol, it's all good
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  12. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    it is easy.....
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  13. Surreal The A.D. Prophet

    Surreal The A.D. Prophet Wondrous Poetic

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    Love
    fluid unchanging
    defining shining permeating
    when we understand our lives
    truth

    never encountered this form. or at least recognized it.
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  14. Anaphora

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    Well, ok... no one else's posted, I'll throw something together I guess... just a second.
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  15. Anaphora

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    Time
    Endless, finite.
    Spanning, guarding, constricting
    Always in the present tense,
    death.

    You cannot escape him
    try as you might,
    as you will.
    You cannot slay him.
    You can waste him
    spend him
    take others
    give yours
    spare a little
    but you can't disrupt him.
    Why do you think they call it science fiction?
    It is a lie.

    He is the linearity
    the only constant
    as people fade into and out of obscurity
    though, obscurity is relative,
    as relatives are obscured by him.
    He ticks away the seconds
    minutes, days, lives, legacies.
    Gently sanding away all impediments
    in the earth's surface,
    and eventually, the earth itself.
    Then the sun, the solar system,
    the galaxy.
    He balls it all back up
    as he's done many times
    and cups it in his hands
    squeezing, compressing
    until it's too intense to be contained
    and he lets it all out
    like a child tossing jacks,
    just to pick them up again,
    and again, and again,
    as the poor child's only game
    is used endlessly,
    poor child.

    Time.
    Poor, bored,
    yawning, stretching, clasping.
    Something needs to change,
    end.
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  16. MANchyld

    MANchyld Guest

    nice shit Anaph.. I forgot mine at home so I'll drop it at around 6pm pacific time when I get back home.....
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  17. Suicide
    tempts, calls,
    binding, enlightening, nothing at all
    Going somewhere, falling apart,
    Chance.

    Oh Lord,
    when a man comes in smothered
    in guilt, as if duvet covers
    which keep him hot and cold
    never quite warm to him enough.
    While his eyes alone
    know the reflection well,
    he talks all securely
    but underneath it is hell.
    When a man takes a woman for granted,
    using her for his best advantage.
    When the end has more appeal,
    can't be real, can't even feel.
    What becomes of him?
    While the end can look rosy
    the blood can seem so red,
    crimson aromas mix together
    and burn incense on the bedspread.
    Like fear and fiery incest
    Something real touching you within,
    Yet the way you feel in the morning
    Cannot be covered by your skin.
    Magnifying and burning the sin
    The sun makes you feel the eternity,
    Death seems the closest step to certainly
    Seeing God through eyes of burgundy.
    The smoke drifts up with a tingling
    suicidal feeling under the skin lingering.
    Two sides of him begin to rise, both brave--
    the moment of truth is whether he leaves
    or he stays.

    Suicide,
    Tempted called,
    Tried, defied, opened door
    Salvation or the dance before damnation,
    Chance.
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  18. dicnyaeye

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    damn, I never been to this forum before

    yall got some skills
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  19. dicnyaeye

    dicnyaeye Guest

    I was just reading what Mind explained on how to write a cinquain.. and Brit, you didn't do it right

    you used too many words

    binding, enlightening, nothing at all (nothing is suppose to stand by itself)
    Going somewhere, falling apart, (this is suppose to be one phrase)

    Salvation or the dance before damnation (too much again)

    but I liked that shit though... just thought you might wanna know
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  20. Well, I have seen these sorts of poems with quite different setups, and apparently the form of the 5 lined poem is still being developed. If Mind~Soul has a problem with the fact that I did not entirely stick to this particular format, I may change it for the sake of what he wanted (above). But I gathered he wanted a Cinquain, and thats what I thought I did. If other kinds of cinquains along with their formats are irrelevant here, then I will understand. If any cinquain is welcome, take mine for what it is...

    let me know whats up
    peace b still
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