Love...will you love me ? <Jus Kinda depressed lately>

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  1. MissChevious

    MissChevious New Member

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    Love is a word mostly spoken by Untrue lips
    A word that is used too freely
    Misunderstood meanings have broken hearts and crumbled worlds

    Broken down the strongest of people
    this word holds so much power
    It molds our mind that we run around blind
    Stuck in a world that does not truely exist

    Eyes pour out tears , hands grasp heart , and they Scream
    I THOUGHT YOU LOVED ME

    But those same words tumble off their tongues
    Hit the floor and shatter into a thousand peices

    Who will ever understand the meaning behind that one single word...

    They have definitions of what this word means
    but this word is undefineable
    Unatainable is the power that it holds
    This word "LOVE"

    Love has broken down walls of security
    Love has laughed in the face of many
    but still you think love loves you?

    Some people say I want someone to love me
    Or do you really?... because how you feel now
    When love gets through with you will you feel any better?
    Or feel 100 times worse ?


    Love ....When will you love Me????????????
    test
  2. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    ......simple but really makes you think......

    But those same words tumble off their tongues
    ^^^
    good line

    "Some people say I want someone to love me
    Or do you really?... because how you feel now
    When love gets through with you will you feel any better?
    Or feel 100 times worse ?"
    ^^^
    hard hitting


    gotta take the bad with the good though because if youve never felt the bad then the good doesnt feel as good......yeah

    nice piece
    test
  3. *GeMiNeYeZ*

    *GeMiNeYeZ* ~§¤Sweet Shinobi¤§~

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    this hit home... i'm feelin depressed myself lately... and all of what u sed is so true... love has broken down the strongest people in its absence... and i'm one of them... i like the poem as a whole because its something alot of people can relate to... it speaks truth... great job.
    test
  4. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    "Love is a word mostly spoken by Untrue lips
    A word that is used too freely
    Misunderstood meanings have broken hearts and crumbled worlds"


    ^^ YES! Finally a piece I can completely relate to and not partially relate to, feel me? Only a couple pieces here in the realm did that for me, but this joint really brought all my emotions out and had my mind free to read, to feel the words, na'mean? Lovely piece, mos def. My blessings..
    test
  5. MissChevious

    MissChevious New Member

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    Ty fo all of your time and responses to my piece much love
    test
  6. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    wow...amazing piece...love it when new people come in and drop some hot shit....

    this was blazing

    flow was on point lots of emotion.....

    It molds our mind that we run around blind
    Stuck in a world that does not truely exist

    dope line

    hope to see more from u
    test
  7. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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    yep^
    test
  8. PrOvOcAtiVeThOuGhT

    PrOvOcAtiVeThOuGhT New Member

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    I enjoyed readin this a lot..normally I like rhymin pieces..but I wuz cuaght by your way of sayin things so much...I jus read on...and I dont regret it...piece wuz simple straight to the point magnificent
    test
  9. Poetical Techniquez

    Poetical Techniquez Lost in Thought

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    firstly i would like to kno y u depressed BUT as for this piece...good to see u write'in again...i thought this piece was explained nicely without to much jump'in around...u can sense the sense of frustration wit a hint of fear all emcompassed by pain yet if looked deep within-at least from my point of view i can still see the want to be loved regardless of tha pain...keep it go'in
    test
  10. mocha_licious

    mocha_licious New Member

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    THIS WAS SO GOOD AND I WANT TO HEAR MORE FROM YOU...I DONT KNOW IF I HAVE RESPONDED TO YOUR PIECES BEFORE OR WHAT...BUT LOVE IS DEFINETLY THIS REASON I WRITE....AND WHENEVER MY LOVE IS BENT OR TOSSED IT SEEMS I WRITE MORE SAD THINGS AND WHENEVER MY LOVE IS ON CLOUD NINE I WRITE MORE SPIRITUAL THINGS....MOS DEF THINK LOVE ITSELF IS INSPIRING AS U PROLLY ALREADY KNOW....



    ~ONE LOVE TO YOU~
    test
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