Love Poem

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  1. kaszmo

    kaszmo New Member

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    Hey i never knew what this is..
    Ur smile ur face ur kiss..
    Damn Im hooked I love u for good..
    Im confused tho, so nice so beautyful
    Can this be right, can this hold for life?
    Im surprised that u feel the same..
    Love ur voice, when u speek my name..
    Love ur lips, boo gimmy kiss..
    Love ur eyes ur face, ur mind ur ways..
    Ur smiles ur tast, ur mine, I shake..
    My hands my legs, kiss ur neck ur cheek..
    We dancin, holdin u close, this is all I need..
    Is this real? Cus this feels like a rush, speed?..
    Am i druged? Nah it cant be, feel ur hands around me..
    This is true, open my hands and touch you..


    i dunno how to end this??

    kasz
    test
  2. unspoken1

    unspoken1 Revolutionary Wordsmen

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    it was cool up until you said are you drugged...kinda took away from the piece....other than that i enjoyed it
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  3. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    cute........love love love.....isnt it fuckin nice

    peace and blessings
    test
  4. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    decent piece, think it could have been a lil better. Seem like something was missin. But keep doing ya thing and welcome to the realm

    one luv
    test
  5. i liked the way it was restless and excitable, fleeting and weaving, like ya couldnt wait to see them again..
    test
  6. kaszmo

    kaszmo New Member

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    thanx yall
    test
  7. *GeMiNeYeZ*

    *GeMiNeYeZ* ~§¤Sweet Shinobi¤§~

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    "Love ur lips, boo gimmy kiss.."

    ehehehehe... thats cute. the whole poem was cute, i think u should add more too it.
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  8. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    i agree with gemineyez....think it could be better if it was longer..but not a bad piece

    up
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