Love Is......

Discussion in 'Poetry Realm' started by j$crILLa, Jul 16, 2003.

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  1. tk2oo3

    tk2oo3 New Member

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    this is the corniest line right here:
    Love is me in my DeVille
    Love takes time and skill
    also when you say love is eternity & love is forever those 2 are basically the same.. one of those should get tossed out.. i like the descriptions you had on love but that really needs elevating its really short, you can keep it in a short style but this either needs length or maybe adding a bit more length to the lines and bringing more of a punch wit imagery.. when you say:
    so whats Love?
    theres no answer, its a feeling
    thats a bit contradicting.. either you have it as its a feeling or theres no answer because its a feeling is an answer throw one of those 2 out whichever you choose is up to you.. also that would better fit the style of the poem because its short.. overall its short n sweet needs a bit more length or imagery whicever you choose n it needs more emotion n feeling, keep elevating..
    test
  2. j$crILLa

    j$crILLa ~$crillVille~

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    dynasty_bich New Member

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    i loved the feeling this gave off, i really felt this piece, keep it comein'.
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  4. j$crILLa

    j$crILLa ~$crillVille~

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