~Lost in Purple Haze (Keystyle)~

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  1. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    This is my plea...
    I yearned for death
    and it still hasnt found
    me...
    too scared to take matters
    in my own hands.
    it's hard tryin learn the ways
    of being a man...
    everyday i wake up to my dick
    in my left hand...
    eagle spreaded, naked
    on my nut stained bed...
    Lost in purple haze
    lips and finger nails
    beginnin to decay
    and turn ebony
    by the day...
    hair nappy
    teeth turnin yella...
    19 year old junkie
    girl left me
    no pussy until I get my shit
    togetha

    today my last hope...
    came through a desperate exhale
    and went afloat...
    i burned my soul
    from inhalin poisonous
    purple dope...
    i wanna change my ways
    but when i take my step forth
    i begin to choke...
    on the air of a new life
    my past doenst want to let go...
    or is that my memory
    that spins my consciousness out of
    control...?

    Lost in Purple Haze
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  2. Nasty__Ness

    Nasty__Ness The Queen of Topicals

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    damn this was some deep shit... very personal effects. It was touching, and revealing... very powerful...

    9/10
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  3. Wicked5744

    Wicked5744 Last I awoke, it was morn

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    This was a personal poem right here and true to life. Very nice drop. Keep the ink flowin.
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  4. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    I agree that it was impressively personal, and ending it with a question shows that you feel like you are the master of your fate...The only answer to your future is handed to you by time so it seems. anyway, good stuff...As always though...Ohh yeah, could you lock down the Drink From Me and Live Forever Poem. I posted another poem and I thought it had already been pushed down to the next page, but apparently it hasnt yet, it's at the bottom, so if its an inconvinience to have 3, then please close that one...peace...
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  5. Dark_Angel

    Dark_Angel Dark_Angel

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    yeah i liked this peice, really deep...i found it different but it was definately a nice peice
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  6. UnknownLady

    UnknownLady Senior Member

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    You know Mind that I love your work. This was deep as hell. Your stuff touch me all time. That isn't more else to say about it but great good and awesome job. Holla at me when you get the chance aight. Good job.


    Holla
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  7. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    nice piece u got here malik.......
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  8. Judge tha Dacyple

    Judge tha Dacyple Poetic Papi Emcee Señor

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    definitely felt man. I like the personal vibe your writing gives, not just because its a personal piece, but because it feels personal to the reader as well. Very strong words.
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  9. skandelous_lala

    skandelous_lala back from the dead

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    that was deep....very personal, good job writing this man
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  10. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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  11. Speedy Gunzalez

    Speedy Gunzalez Awareness is my Alias

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    Everybody pretty much summed up the highlights of your piece.

    Your transitions from line to line were fluid, which made the poem to me much more enjoyable.

    " wanna change my ways
    but when i take my step forth
    i begin to choke...
    on the air of a new life
    my past doenst want to let go...
    or is that my memory
    that spins my consciousness out of
    control...?"

    I really like your ending man.

    one luv pimpin..
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  12. vinous

    vinous New Member

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    grrr, i hate replyin late, everyones already said wat i wanted to. but anyway, most def loved the personal touch you imprinted on this piece. niceness. pz.
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  13. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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    yeah although i havent woken up with my dick in my hand ,i've definitly felt where your comming from

    (no pun intended lol)^^^
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  14. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    thanks for the love
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  15. ThisMiss

    ThisMiss Guest

    damn this was deep *wipes tears away*
    i cant quote a part...
    cause it was all so good
    i loved the ending...
    and the begining...
    ....and the middle [funny]
    good job =)
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  16. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    "i burned my soul...." damn i liked that

    you always touch me malik.....good stuff
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  17. mocha_licious

    mocha_licious New Member

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    i liked this alot...i love out the box pieces and this was one of them...ty for sharing this with me and others...sorry for sleepin...kep writing casue i want to keep readin..~one l ove~
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