Loser

Discussion in 'Poetry Realm' started by allnakey, Nov 7, 2012.

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  1. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    Haven't been here in a while. This is not like anything I ever posted on here before. It's kind of humorous and it reminds me of everyday life a lot.


    The tide turns and someday I just feel stupid


    Like…
    Sitting on a street bench getting laughed at
    By some guy named Chad with a soul patch
    He’s such a jackass, Nah let me retract that

    I’m just jealous.

    Or…
    I lack confidence, or common sense
    Ever since I respond in mutters
    My brain huddles in it’s own corner

    So thoughtless.

    Serious…
    Maybe just delirious to an extent
    Out of tune, I’ll just auto tune
    Sound popular, maybe get a tatoo too

    Now I’m Kanye West

    Effortless…
    I’m on top of this, no stopping it
    Dropped out of school, still no knowledge
    But I’m so damn hood rich

    Unemployment checks.

    Relative…
    Still definitively obvious but predominate
    I got swag, isn’t that relevant?
    Tried so hard, but still so mad

    I almost forgot.

    Fuck Chad!
    test
  2. Coup d'état

    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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    I'm liking the pace of this, it guides along. Maybe chad is content in his mediocre mindset...you just be comfortable playing your own deck...screw the house, but it does always win.

    Great piece, deff. drop some more work bro
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  3. Chavvah

    Chavvah New Member

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    Yo!! This was so relative!!! As we all try to find our own identity we get lost in everyone else's at times. This "where am I" more so than "who am I" question throughout the whole piece was a great way to explore the thought process of us being so ridiculous sometimes. I loved it!!
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  4. jesuit223

    jesuit223 Member

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    tee hee I can realate...
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  5. MissAndrya

    MissAndrya Evolution is what is.

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    That was entertaining, and a fun way to think about who we 'are in any given day or moment. What we do, what we believe we can accomplish changes daily, a piece I think many can relate to.
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  6. jesuit223

    jesuit223 Member

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    This was even better the second time I read it. One of those poems that grows with you as you are reading it ;)
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  7. SAMARA

    SAMARA truth is a sword

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    lol

    you need to stop drinking that moonshine.
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