looking in the window

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  1. SIZZLA

    SIZZLA New Member

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    allow me this moment~
    to stare into the eyes of this~
    amazing being~
    and cause my unhindered imagination~
    to ride along the rhythm~
    of her song.

    if music is alive~
    then her eyes be of the living.
    they invoke the Spirit~
    of comfort within me`
    as my inner man~
    gives way to genial sway.

    if eyes are indeed~
    the window to ones soul~
    and if even at all possible~
    souls can touch~
    then i humbly muse~
    in this awesome embrace.

    as does Mighty Ra~
    when he reaches out into the universe~
    so does the energy that ~
    emanates from your light.
    let the music play~
    let the darkness
    that existed sease~
    and let it be said this day~
    that ive brushed the wings of~
    an Angel ~
    One with eyes like rubies~
    and~
    the object of my ~
    imagination...

    she is paradise.
    SIZZLA, May 25, 2003
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  3. MISSKEYdaQUEEN

    MISSKEYdaQUEEN Watch the black panther..

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    oH MY GOODNESS...FOR JUST LIKE 7 SECONDS i FELL IN DEEP PASSIONATE LOVE WITH YOU!!

    LOL...NAH BUT REALLY!!

    This piece is beautiful and I read it with my eyes open. Even if I were to pin point a certain part I liked most I'd just end up qouting the whole poem!!

    Beautiful Sizzla...beautiful!!
    MISSKEYdaQUEEN, May 25, 2003
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  4. MISSKEYdaQUEEN

    MISSKEYdaQUEEN Watch the black panther..

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    oops...I meant i read it with my mouth open..lol..duhhh
    MISSKEYdaQUEEN, May 25, 2003
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  5. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    always enjoy your work

    and this is no different

    if eyes are indeed~
    the window to ones soul~
    and if even at all possible~
    souls can touch~
    then i humbly muse~
    in this awesome embrace.

    lovin that

    as well as the end

    up
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  6. WoKoBo

    WoKoBo New Member

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    totally amazing....loved every single word in it...keep up the good work...loved it
    WoKoBo, May 25, 2003
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  7. Strike2

    Strike2 Man Meets Creator

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    very strong piece...indeed...great imagery metaphoric use of words.. I have no real other reply then that
    Strike2, May 25, 2003
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    I smell oh so clearly the scents you have laid down before us with your words...

    ...but one that bring bitter-sweet emotions, ones which i smell oh so often, imbedded in my soul, my mind, my heart...my thoughts......compounded by the relative beauty of this poem...

    ...nothing else to say...

    ..resp...
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  9. unspoken1

    unspoken1 Revolutionary Wordsmen

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    *applause* nicely done mon ami...a very good read
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  10. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    incredible piece

    one luv
    Mind~$oul, May 25, 2003
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  11. SIZZLA

    SIZZLA New Member

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    i forgot about that... this poem is poetry... i like...


    UP...
    SIZZLA, May 30, 2003
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  12. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    These metaphorical statements really gets to me, I was loving the style and organization of the poem. I as well kept my eyes strady moving down the piece, listening to the voice of the one who wrote it. A piece that had me dwelling upon everything you had said, mos def. My blessings..
    TuNed RooT, May 30, 2003
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  13. SIZZLA

    SIZZLA New Member

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    YAH be praised....
    SIZZLA, Jun 8, 2003
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