Let's Be Real...

Discussion in 'Poetry Realm' started by BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum, May 27, 2003.

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  1. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    Excuse me, I saw you from across the room
    I
    had to mention your name to my soul
    It's better than a pinch to see if I'm alive
    Or even awake.
    So let's cut the bullshit,
    Let's be real.

    Baby you so fine, I wanna cheat on you.
    Beat you and wipe away the tears that I bring to you.
    Argue with you, be angry
    And not let you know why.
    Claim you don't understand me because I don't wanna try
    I
    Want something inside of you to die
    Instead of us living togehter
    Instead of wanting to try
    I want you to disorient your life
    And pattern it around mine
    Get into the psyche of a broken man's mind
    I
    Want to obscond from your friends
    And make you love only me
    Make you cry in sorrow as you're
    Holding me
    I want you to be jealous
    I want to beat that fools ass
    The one who I saw starin' at you
    In them tight ass pants.
    I want to call you a bitch
    whore
    cunt
    skank
    trick
    liar
    wifey
    hoe
    And tell you later
    You're the only bitch for me
    I want to call you
    tonight if I can
    Say you the shit to me
    Call you the mother of my children
    Call myself a man
    I want you to taste me
    Feel the force of my hands
    I want you to hate me
    I want this to last
    At least a few months
    Or till the feeling's passed
    I
    Want you to wonder
    Who that bitch was in my ride
    Why I got one less condom
    In that pack I tried to hide
    I want you to ask
    Who's f*ckin' number is this
    Who's panties are those
    They fa damn sho' don't fit this
    I want you to wonder
    Like a moron
    If I'm faithful.
    Bitch, of course I'm not!
    What you think this is?
    I
    Want you to hurt
    I want you to bleed
    I want you to grit and
    Grind your teeth
    Just not on these
    not on these
    not on these
    I want you to see me
    As your only reason to be.
    I want you to be
    The generic
    Girl
    For
    Me.
    I
    Want you to kill for me
    Starting with your self esteem,
    Learn to love and trust only me
    Above God, allah, or whomever you used to love
    And I want you more so to confuse abuse with love.
    No sense in bullshittin',
    Nobody ever says it
    But it's always what happens
    So let's set it out from the beginning.
    Happy Anniversary.
    Un
    Happy
    Inna
    Verse
    I'm sorry....​
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  2. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    [dunno] guess don't nobody wanna be real.
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  3. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    Word@being real, because this is the truth basically. What you want to say, but can't, because it's just wrong. You know you do it, though, you know? But, I think this is one of the more open pieces, because it's just coming from reality. As you said in the title, "Let's Be Real" and it fit the title, completely. Nice topic, excellant way of approaching something NEW and creative. My blessings..

    *by the way, hit my piece up, family. They fell asleep for now, I guess..
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  4. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    This is mos def a real piece. I use to feel this way about shit on things. But didnt know to say it or how it would come out. Scared of the reaction i might get. Good shit blacksoul

    one luv
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  5. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    Thanks, y'all. It's a step away from my usual style, but...
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  6. Klasic

    Klasic Im not that friendly when this cup is empty

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    ayo this was fuckin sick,

    hot shit bro!
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  7. Very, different, i did like it, and i didnt also. It showed much bitterness and anger, and also love and affection, a harsh balance, like a freezing kinda energy about it.
    A wolf in sheeps clothing.

    latez
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  8. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    [funny] my girl loved and hated it too.
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  9. MISSKEYdaQUEEN

    MISSKEYdaQUEEN Watch the black panther..

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    Wow..

    This was brutally honest.²²²²utally...

    I'm troubled on how you were able to bring this forth so..hmmm....naturally..but than again a poet does magical things with the idea and the ritten word!
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  10. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    Thanks. It's a rough draft.
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  11. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    Damn dawg...you make me wanna vote you for president and shit after reading this..This made my day. This actually is very real, and probably lies in every man's subconscience. When we say "I love you" What that really means is "Bitch shut the fuck up and suck my dick after I done fucked 3 other bitches this week" lol I have a piece that's somewhat similar to this but goes in a different direction. Enough rambling for me, this joint was the shiznit bottom line.
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  12. unspoken1

    unspoken1 Revolutionary Wordsmen

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    very very nice piece man....the second stanza tripped me out ahha
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  13. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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  14. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    damn damn damn......this got to me......wow

    this piece really spoke to me at this time......very solid piece.....im pretty much speechless right now.....
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  15. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    Got damn!! I'm lookin at this lthe second time around like how come I didn't think of that first? Un Happy Inna Verse? I'm Sorry" That shit was clever right there.
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  16. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    yeah, that's one of the edits I made.

    thanks for the feedback. These last two pieces (this one and "have some tealoveme") were less methodical and more outpouring of my soul. The true beauty of writing a keystyle/freestyle.
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  17. *GeMiNeYeZ*

    *GeMiNeYeZ* ~§¤Sweet Shinobi¤§~

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    damn....

    this gotta be the realest thing i've ever read from you... gosh, it felt as if u were talkin to me almost... but nonethe less, i couldnt pull a quote from this cuz i'd quote the whole thing... damn its wonderful...
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  18. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    You know, it's disturbing to me how many women can relate to being the subject of such abuse. Thanks for your comments.

    Keep shinin'
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  19. Kpucha

    Kpucha Guest

    THAT is what makes this so intriguing....as a woman reading this..it surprises me that the one part I really found objectionable was the part about cheating...

    So it really says something about the reader and their self respect, now doesnt it.....

    AND I have to add...ok, I wont....lol

    Suffice to say, there is a brute animal type feeling in this.

    Excellent especially because I cant imagine being able to sit down and write something that would cause the reader to question attitudes (some hidden) this successfully.
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  20. Old Soul

    Old Soul Nipple Nibbler

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    Yo, this will have to suffice unless you want me to quote the whole damn thing. This is truly amazing.
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