Let the rest sleep

Discussion in 'Poetry Realm' started by Shit with corn in it IRM'S BITCH, May 30, 2003.

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  1. Cotton between fine fingers
    opinions never rest on the bed of fine linen
    stretching out to become comfortable
    all is quiet listen
    Warmth covering a body stays hidden
    comfortable silence
    sun shut out wind comes whistling
    Breezing by another sleepless night
    resting while the world goes by
    my hammock swinging from daylight
    test
  2. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    i likes like always brit.....maybe this sounds stupid but this kinda seems like a big hiku to me....<-- lol at the spelling...but u know what i mean.....real easy read...liked it...caught some good visuals....i imagine myself lying in the hammock...

    keep it up...and um....

    why havent u been checkin out my work lately.....u dont like it

    anymore...lol....j/k...just wonderin where u been hiden at.

    UP
    test
  3. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    Nice visuals, as lpoet commented on. I thought it was short and you had said what you needed to say, basically. I liked both the pieces that I've seen so far by you. This had an original concept, as well as some twisted rhyme scheme, which I found quite nice. Keep it steady. My blessings..
    test
  4. *GeMiNeYeZ*

    *GeMiNeYeZ* ~§¤Sweet Shinobi¤§~

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    short but sweet... and colorful... i love this piece simply because its true... opinions never rest on the bed of fine linen...
    test
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