~Lennon Like~

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  1. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    This is a keystyle I did lastnight after hearing this Nas song I heard from the first time. I dont know if it's new or not, but he sampled a song from John Lennon i'm sure most of you have heard before..."Imagine". One of my favorite songs. Here's the link if you want to check out the song.


    http://fileserv1.soundclick.com/fastg9/HiD/twistedbeats nasandpitbull.mp3


    sometimes i wish i could
    imagine like
    lennon...
    and maybe this stress could
    soothe in...
    away in my scarred
    skin...
    it's just a
    vision...


    a curse was brought
    upon me...
    because i lied to the devil
    once to many...
    and it seems like every corner i turn
    he's there...
    and he wont go...
    until he can taste
    my soul....
    but my wrist bled
    long ago...
    and my soul is just
    an echo...echo

    if that could be
    my intro...
    i'll have no complaints of my live
    being so short...
    or no regrets from changing
    my course...
    that's supposedly
    led to god...
    i cant help my
    prematue thoughts...
    shit it was the
    bible's fault...
    dark scriptures had me scared
    to talk...
    but if a book could change it's ways
    why was it wrong for me to change
    my walk...?
    my mother said because it will
    lead me to a path
    she choose...
    i saw the shit around
    her nose...
    i saw how she lost
    to blow...
    and died to something they still dont have
    an answer for...
    i hardly managed to make it out
    of that path...
    you'd think through all of that i would have found religon
    but a pew would never
    touch my ass...
    i want to hear
    a voice...
    because i dont have the faith
    to believe in
    written words...

    except mines...
    test
  2. illpoetical

    illpoetical raising the bar everyday

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    and my soul is just
    an echo...echo

    that's ill soul per usual
    you are a poet with a purpose keep writing
    stay up
    test
  3. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    "a curse was brought
    upon me...
    because i lied to the devil
    once to many..."

    Damn you had some many jst really nice parts in here, this was real nice

    "my soul is just
    an echo...echo"

    I like how you repeated the ECHO, that just gave it a nice effect when reading through it

    "because i dont have the faith
    to believe in
    written words...

    except mines..."

    AInt that the truth



    I just got the feeling with this piece like you were lost, but you know your lost and you're not willing to get on a certain path of clearity. You want to walk your own path and see thing through your eyes. Believing what is real to you, not real to everyone else.

    I heard the song that you wrote this too, I dont really think Nas should be sampling that Lennon song, It just dont feel right when listening to it, And IM a HUGE nas fan, but I aint like this.

    The title of this piece really grabbed and lead me in, Im still kind of interested by it and I can see how what you wrote kind of relates into the song. This was just good writing, so much emotion and truth, I was feeling this piece the whole way through.


    Stay Up, Much Love, Peace
    test
  4. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    yall better reply to this shit or i'm closin everything on the first page!!!
    test
  5. quotive

    quotive 3

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    Dope.... the song was ill though lol
    test
  6. RealMS

    RealMS Ne te quaesiveris extra

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    i cant help my
    prematue thoughts...
    shit it was the
    bible's fault...
    dark scriptures had me scared
    to talk...
    but if a book could change it's ways
    why was it wrong for me to change
    my walk...?

    I thought that was crazy, (in a good way) it's like you put a hault on writing, then all of a sudden you're back again, and not just writing a bunch of blahhhh, but something as good as this, the rhyme scheme, the way it was structured, its meaning most of all-that was a good read from you. I didn't listen to the song, not enough time, but I got it here lol. Anyways, that was good, keep it up.
    Much Love


    yall better reply to this shit or i'm closin everything on the first page!!!
    I bet you would too lol
    -Peace
    test
  7. Cereal_Killer

    Cereal_Killer no ESCAPE

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    i haven't been here in awhile i've missed you guys.... nice drop i like the new style you've got here MS very nice.

    because i dont have the faith
    to believe in
    written words...

    except mines...

    that i felt. wow

    the echo ECHO thing put a smile on my face to.

    keep it up.

    aim me if you ever wanna collab mind soul.... cereal6killa
    test
  8. MarQuise*

    MarQuise* Can You Hear Me*

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    First and foremost let me jus say 'WOW', lol, this was KraZy, str8 FiYah. Maybe because i also Lv 'imagine', maybe bcoz i Lv Nas, i have no idea, i listened to this song while readin ur work, and my gosh, you did gr8 justice. When i read ur title, i was thinkin yea, this shud be aight, and as soon as i read to what you were sayin about you were listenin to that particular nas song i knew this shit wud be deep. Which i gotta say, i think this is D Double E P. This one of my fave drops from you.
    Much Much Lv

    This was KraZy, next time you thinkin of listenin to John lennon 'imagine' holla at me, i wud Lv to collab wit you...
    *S*
    test
  9. MarQuise*

    MarQuise* Can You Hear Me*

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    Sowie, one last thing, couldnt b bothered to edit my last one lol, lazy*, anywayz, i forgot to say that this KraZy drop ended way too soon, i was really gettin in to it, and the closure killed me, i was left thinkin 'damn, where the rest, dont stop...'
    Much Lv *again*
    test
  10. UnknownLady

    UnknownLady Senior Member

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    Mind you already know what I think
    Tight as hell
    You know you got t going it on
    Holla back at me aight

    Upping
    test
  11. This had a lot of feeling Mindsoul, I listened to the song aswell, brought back a lot of memories..keep it up
    test
  12. misspimp

    misspimp a.k.a KATURAH

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    dark scriptures had me scared
    to talk...


    damn the last lines were hot as shit and really made me think. I really loved this piece...esspecially the last stanza....flow was real real good there...

    mad love
    test
  13. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    thanks for the love fellas. Last up
    test
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