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  1. Church

    Church New Member

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    my first post here..

    ladder

    i am but a ladder, but not for others.

    ( i stand under others, no. but, i stand under me, yes.
    yes, me understands i, but, no others understand i. )


    a trophy yet an achilles heel
    a prized acquaintance, but a loose change companion

    (i shall never succeed at my quest for acceptance
    unnoticed do my works go, they are never above-adequate)


    dull in the seclusional shadows i cling to
    if only light were shed on me, i would shimmer
    yes i'd shimmer, but only in my dreams
    for i stray from light, and it hides from me

    (we were never meant, only maybe others the benefit
    benefit the others, maybe only meant, never were we.)


    pain shows emotion, and i shy to not impress more, any less self, not am i
    i am not selfless anymore, impress not, too shy. i, and emotion shows pain

    i am of fault, and guilt is a lonely pleasure
    damned if i allow popularity demean integrity
    too steep is the empty balcony to my happiness

    (a broken whisper reminds me that the void will go unfilled
    yearning for anyone to join my side in this journey)


    i am but a ladder, but not for others.
    test
  2. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    Interesting concept here and how you climb a ladder to be a better person for yourself, maybe. You could mean that, as well. I found this piece quite nice, actually with all the deep explanations on what you really meant by it, but you should let us think for ourselves, On the other hand, that might just be your style.. Overall, nice piece, mos def. My blessings..
    test
  3. UFO the Phoenix

    UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS!

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    Word?!

    I like this right here

    interesting topic

    and I like the way you wrote it
    test
  4. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    this was dope....really creative...lovin how u put this together....would like to see more from u

    keep it up
    test
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