krooked*k vs. drugs(topical style)

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  1. canabi

    canabi Blow Me

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    topic:your friends dare you to spend a night in a "spooky" cemetary......expand
    do you stay leave or what....
    what happens

    no bs votes or hate
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  2. Complete Chaos

    Complete Chaos I'm Drugs.

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  3. Complete Chaos

    Complete Chaos I'm Drugs.

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    here i am on a dare my friends tryin to scare me
    i stare into the fog, glace at tombstone that said mary
    its filled with leaves, now im thinkin bout my beliefs
    it clamed me until i saw a girl that didnt have any teeth
    i uncovered it, its slick from the moss and mildew
    it says the angel's heaven sent so toss me a pillow
    before i sleep i wandered around the corpse filled ground
    i heard a sound from the distance, the figure was round
    so i stepped close but slowly, thinkin this aint holy
    im the only on here, but i have a shovel that im holdin
    then it disappeared my mind is playin tricks on me
    i got my head clear, then i heard to couples bickering
    maybe the voices are comin from my head so i relaxed
    someones standin over me his face gone before i looked back
    i ran then hands popped up from the dirt, like on command
    this was a bad plan, to just stand here and act like a man
    i saw a beautiful girl but with a slit throat she had cancer
    she asked me, if i was a neck romancer and if i needed a dancer
    this shocked me, a dead girl talkin to me, and im not on ectasy
    whats standin next to me? a decayed dog whos nametag said penelopee
    it had me shook, i closed my eyes so i couldnt look
    then when i opened em it took me by surprise like a crook
    everything vanished, all the souls have be banished
    i look on my arm its been branded with shit, im famished
    i stared at on the corpses, who had no remorse
    he said ive been takin by force he was a florist
    the ground opened up a hole and swallowed me whole
    then im fallin outta control hit the ground and started to roll
    i stood up and couldnt see straight it was all blurry
    i was in flurry of hellfire, then i started to worry
    and now because of a stupid bet, im in debt to satan
    now ill never die, hopefully this a dream and ill awaken
    i screamed how can this be? .............
    then he spoke and said im gonna be in hell for eternity...
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  4. Krooked*k

    Krooked*k That's Krook to you

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    The wind wisped threw the tree tops, the air was thin
    the night was dark, and i was in the middle of the cemetary plots-
    I walked soft, wondering like i was lost,
    and abruptly stopped at what id just came across-
    a young girl.......but with her arms and legs chopped off.
    I cringed in shock, took two steps back and booked it down the block-
    looked down at my wrist watch, but it had stopped, at 9 o'clock
    and I thought. FUCK! its gotta be one by now
    I couldn't see a soul around, and it had to be at least 10 miles to the nearest town!
    my jog turned to a speed-walk, which turned to a slow pace,
    until finally my eye's caught site of " the holy church of grace"
    I busted threw the lobby doors- Holaring franticly-
    "there's a girl, and she was murdered, up at the old cemetary
    the pastors secratary,
    covered her mouth and reply'd
    "Lord, can it be" " a young girl HAS been missing, the pastors daughter AnaLee............
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  5. Complete Chaos

    Complete Chaos I'm Drugs.

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    good shit, mang
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  6. Krooked*k

    Krooked*k That's Krook to you

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    for sure you to.
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  7. Krooked*k

    Krooked*k That's Krook to you

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    how bout some votes though
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  8. Krooked*k

    Krooked*k That's Krook to you

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    yall are robbing us
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  9. Complete Chaos

    Complete Chaos I'm Drugs.

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    its gon take a long time to get votes....
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  10. canabi

    canabi Blow Me

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    vote n this mothafukkin shit motha fukkas
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  11. Londo

    Londo Fuck You

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    Drugs - good writing scheme, good flow to it, great imagery, and nice use of multies
    I'd try to use more multies but that's just me. Good drop none the less.

    Krooked - Not bad. Alright imagery, rhyme scheme was kinda eh, and I couldn't find a flow to it. The part where you were slowing down from a jog to a speedwalk, I didn't understand why you weren't running faster. Not a bad verse though. Work on what I mentioned and continue to improve. That goes for both of you


    vote - Drugs
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  12. Complete Chaos

    Complete Chaos I'm Drugs.

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  13. canabi

    canabi Blow Me

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    ight ill give you that vote no more newbie votes

    300 posts to vote
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  14. Complete Chaos

    Complete Chaos I'm Drugs.

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    ok, 300 +..... it is, this will be finished in a month hopefully
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  15. O.Kay

    O.Kay The Don

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    i was gonna vote on this....Oh well..
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  16. Complete Chaos

    Complete Chaos I'm Drugs.

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    fuck the 300+ just give me explained votes
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  17. G. O. A. T.

    G. O. A. T. Greatest Of All Time...

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    talk about new'b vote..drugs had a horrible verse..not enough imagination..wording was horrible..but Krooked was ill..not long enough but ill..and deff beat drugs..dip shit..amd to prove it.. " i saw a beautiful girl but with a slit throat she had cancer
    she asked me, if i was a neck romancer and if i needed a dancer"...ok thought so..
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  18. Complete Chaos

    Complete Chaos I'm Drugs.

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    if you understood the line, it would make sense to you, but thats ok... you suck as it is, now stop tryin to sway votes, and take me fuckin your crew up with a smile
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  19. Londo

    Londo Fuck You

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    I am no newbie and will crush your whole crew by myself.
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  20. G. O. A. T.

    G. O. A. T. Greatest Of All Time...

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    son ur no wer near my topical level..i dont really battle..ur llucky u didnt go against me..u didnt fuck shit up homie..i won u in the battle and krook will win u here unless theres a person like londo who doesnt know true mc'ing from pre-skool rhymes..
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