"Kid"napper

Discussion in 'Poetry Realm' started by Revanon, Aug 3, 2003.

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  1. Revanon

    Revanon Comeback of the Year.

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    You stole my kids from me,
    funny
    and I'm the deadbeat father that supposedly doesn't bother to call
    more like;
    I'm the concerned parent that doesn't bother to brawl
    Why am I fighting you
    You stole the kids from me
    "honey"
    and yet I'm the one to blame cause I ain't seen my kids for a year
    more like:
    I never boarded planes cause I was living in fear
    Why am I fighting you
    I stayed away from the conflict, I wrote and sent pictures
    While your family can comfortably call me ²²²²²²
    Standing amongst theives and those that decieve
    With so much animosity built up, how's our children to be?
    Advertising their smiles, then dish out threats of regret
    All of the past I strive to forget
    To be quite honest
    If I knew this from the start, we would have never had kissed
    I could hate someone to kill my mom
    and wouldn't fuck you with his dick
    Blunt
    You stole the kids from me
    Funny
    and all you think about is yourself and your life and missed it
    more like:
    I wish July 7th truly never existed
    Why am I fighting you

    You stole the kids from me....

    Kidnapper
    test
  2. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    i like it.....full of emotion....hope its not true..............


    keep doing ya thang
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  3. Revanon

    Revanon Comeback of the Year.

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    Its true
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  4. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    i'm sorry
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  5. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    sorry about the situation you goin through. Dont know what i'll do if somebody kept my child away from me. But keep ya head up and stay strong.

    One luv
    test
  6. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    I dont have any children of my own, dont want any either, but I work with them everyday and I know what it is to have love for children so I would more than likely loose my sanity if someone stole one of those loved children from me. Anyway, I hope all goes well for you, and a little hope can go a long way. I like this piece though, its honestly is compelling...
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  7. *Princess*

    *Princess* skantless bitch

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    loved the emotion...great piece
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  8. skandelous_lala

    skandelous_lala back from the dead

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    sad piece man..you can feel the anger and sadness in it...God bless
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  9. Revanon

    Revanon Comeback of the Year.

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    Thanks everyone. Means alot.
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  10. Dough Jordan

    Dough Jordan Sky's No Limit Of Mine...

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    are u talking about child services?
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  11. Revanon

    Revanon Comeback of the Year.

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  12. 49th Prophet

    49th Prophet Dark Magic Inferno

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    Revanon I too think this peice is deep with emotion...I do not, however, like the situation of the story, its heart breakin, I hope you prevail.

    much love
    test
  13. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    that's sad, I don't know what i would do if i was in that situation. Nice piece sad, but great emotion


    stay up, much love, peace
    test
  14. BruvaG

    BruvaG So Old School...

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    I'm sorry to hear this Rev...hold your head dawg and keep buildin...improvin your future is the only way to make sure that you remain a part of your kid's lives in the future...
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  15. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    really feeling this piece.......ive seen this kinda shit happen way too many times.....i hope shit works out for you i truly do.....peace and blessings
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  16. Revanon

    Revanon Comeback of the Year.

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  17. William

    William William Mufucka!!

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    dont know what id do if i didnt have mah daughter no more

    good luck wit cha sitchyation
    test
  18. disciplestylez

    disciplestylez Broken Soul

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    sorry about all of your troubles, i hope things start looking up for ya....

    peace and love
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  19. Revanon

    Revanon Comeback of the Year.

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    Thanks again.
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  20. marc antony

    marc antony It's all about da ass....

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    lol thats a funny post.

    i mean i respect your situation, but flat out bluntness is funny to me

    i like the ending

    "KIDNAPPER"

    i mean i felt the emotion becasue of just that one word.

    i like that that word puts YOU into your poetry which is an element most people fail to realize in poetry.

    great piece and keep puttin more of yourself in your pieces.

    ONE LOVE!!!!!!!!
    test
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