Keystyle by Misskey....."Not So Gray"

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  1. MISSKEYdaQUEEN

    MISSKEYdaQUEEN Watch the black panther..

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    I sat in the corner thinking of you
    grieving for you..
    missing you.
    Fresh tears flowed over all ready evaporated trails of despair.
    I sat in the corner enveloped in darkness
    A blanket of depression covering me
    A blanket so warm and inviting
    and hiding me of potential realities of hope.
    I sat in the corner against the cold drafty room wall
    stared at the gray walls
    Not really gray..
    but my tears and sorrow had washed away all true color
    So gray is the color of choice
    The gray walls
    the gray bed
    the gray tears
    the gray fingers that wiped away the tears..
    the gray coldness that cradled my in this gray bassinet of sadness
    I sat in the corner thinking of you
    but was interrupted by warmth
    Warmth interrupted my comforting coldness...
    My gray cold blanket was being pulled away
    I pulled it back..
    but then it disappeared
    Where is my cold?
    Where is my gray?
    My gray window that was once cold and uninviting betrayed me..
    I sat in the corner and gazed at yellow sunrays
    the yellow
    the yellow sunrays



    I just did this...I think doing keystyles helps bring things out of me...any type of critique(sp?) would be appreciated.

    I hope you all enjoy!
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  2. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    When you miss this man you love and cherish or whatever you feel for him, everything becomes sad and lost for you, it seems. Without him, their is no brightness within your day or life and all you say is grey and all objects colorless. Yet, when you think of him and think postive when he's on your mind. Now, you may begin seeing colors, because once you think of him and feel him in your heart, it reassures you that he is with you mentally. This is what I believe the meaning is, just what I got from it. Correct me if I'm wrong, but overall, very extravagant piece that you've created. My blessings..
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  3. MISSKEYdaQUEEN

    MISSKEYdaQUEEN Watch the black panther..

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    You are partly right. You see...when you see what you want to see in an individual and it isn't what it is, you can put yourself in a place that is non-conducive to good things for yourself..DEPRESSION.

    When you start seeing him..or anything for what it really is...and stop dwelling on the "grayness" then color comes back..it may be uncomfortable at first but..it will be better!
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  4. UFO the Phoenix

    UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS!

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    oooooh love this right here

    I like the word-play on the colors you talked about

    mixing colors with emotions and objects...very deep stuff

    Interesting poem right here no doubt

    this was a keystyle...wow

    Much props

    stay up

    PEACE AND GODBLESS
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  5. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    Thanks for the correction, boo. Did my mind right, heh. Uppin' for her..
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  6. MISSKEYdaQUEEN

    MISSKEYdaQUEEN Watch the black panther..

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    nah..you got what you got from it...I wouldn't say you are wrong though![smash]
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  7. reincarnation

    reincarnation New Member

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    that was tight ..haha
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  8. MISSKEYdaQUEEN

    MISSKEYdaQUEEN Watch the black panther..

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    Wow...blast from the past...lol


    goodness..I forgot about this,lol
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  9. Bhitiah

    Bhitiah Powerful Scriptures

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    Wow, How did I miss this?????

    This was way cool girl ...Damn, You on some weird shit lately...lol
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  10. illpoetical

    illpoetical raising the bar everyday

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    yo queen, first off thanks for replying to my poem and my baby is most likely gonna be alright, i appreciate you extending yourself out like that if i get a chance ill call, my baby could still be sick just not as bad as the doctors thought but i have to wait and see, i will let you know, again thanks for caring and being there, your heart is so big

    tight piece as usual

    stay up
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  11. RealMS

    RealMS Ne te quaesiveris extra

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    Yall sometimes amaze me with these "keystyles." Shouldn't be any excuse for writers to somehow not write. I like how you turned it around. Funny how you say you don't wanna feel better about the situation ("pulling it back" line) because I think I do the same thing sometimes.

    -Much Love
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  12. MISSKEYdaQUEEN

    MISSKEYdaQUEEN Watch the black panther..

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    I would actually appreciate someone closing this piece so my piece on the 2nd page can be upped for comments..

    mods please..this peace is 2 yrs old,lol.
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