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Discussion in 'Poetry Realm' started by MarQuise*, Dec 16, 2004.

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  1. Andre_Compadre

    Andre_Compadre What Up Blood?

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    the cow god muja puja kuja is calling, OAAAAAAAAM!
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  2. ManMadeofAshes

    ManMadeofAshes *DREAMER

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    I like the peice. Very vivid description with something as simple as a kiss. Suddely I feel room for error haha. (which is why there are so many bad kissers?)

    one of my favorite lines and the imagery attached is

    "Your hands trace my hips
    I work my way down using my lips"

    ^that is nice right there.

    good piece. short and sweet

    ashes
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  3. MarQuise*

    MarQuise* Can You Hear Me*

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    Let me jus say a big thank you to every1 who left this poem feed, i Lv the fact you all came in here and peepd my poem, and dropped feed, much appreciated...

    Thanx, and im glad that ya'll were feeling it, im happy =) my writing made ya'll think a lil, and im glad it was descriptive enuf to create images in your head...

    I dont like to give much about myself away, but i guess i let go with this one...

    I dont mind pourin my heart out on a poem, but i guess when it comes to 'sensual' things such as this, i felt a lil weary...

    Much Lv to every1...

    *S*
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  4. nathedawg

    nathedawg New Member

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    much luv to you too...

    Im taking it that youre a glad person... according to how many times you said "im glad"

    lol

    tooshort
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  5. MarQuise*

    MarQuise* Can You Hear Me*

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    *Check ya rep* (TooShort21)
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  6. nathedawg

    nathedawg New Member

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    damn girl...

    its like that

    well since this is really the only way I can show you my appreciation!!

    thanks marquise..
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  7. MarQuise*

    MarQuise* Can You Hear Me*

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    NO need fot the thanx...

    Nah wud like to hit up a collabo wit you one time...

    Jus coz i like the fact that you made a comment on females 'havin their shit 2gether'

    ...*

    You know us females run things lol...
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  8. nathedawg

    nathedawg New Member

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    oh... is that why!! lol

    well then, im all ears for the collab.. there's only one condition

    you have to write your piece first, simply because I want to feed of of your piece... I think it would be more "appropiate"!

    okay

    who run this... marquise!! lol
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  9. MarQuise*

    MarQuise* Can You Hear Me*

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    lol all ears for a acollabo but not a general convo!

    Well i jus got back in to writing again, after a VERY long break, so im rusty... but ima be droppin a new KeyStyle in the realm soon...
    Jus completed it last nite...

    anywayz, for now im out...

    Hit me up when you can =)

    Pe@cE 'n' Lv

    ...*
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  10. nathedawg

    nathedawg New Member

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    fo sure... you are officially my favorite female poet... its been a long time coming!! lol

    Ive read almost all your pieces.. mmkay

    Ill hit you up fo sure

    btw.... we can have a general convo if you must!!!! lol

    nah im just playing, you're probably twice as interesting as I give you credit for!!! just joking)
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  11. ChyllTyrant

    ChyllTyrant AmIEternalOrAnEternalist?

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    yes... this was pretty and nice, and overall kind of sappy yet at the same time beautiful...

    i just thought i'd jump on the bandwagon, and give this a little feed.

    nah, i'm just playin... this deserved a reply...

    stay up, keep droppin

    PEACE
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  12. kyza soza

    kyza soza This way up.

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    ^my ~~~~~ tyrant, hows it going brudah.
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  13. ChyllTyrant

    ChyllTyrant AmIEternalOrAnEternalist?

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    chillin doggy, how are you?

    i'll check out one of your poems and leave some feed... try to return the favor when u can.

    PEACE
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  14. UFO the Phoenix

    UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS!

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    woooord up

    this was sweet....reminded me of my first REAL kiss...the passion with the detail took the reader into this poem....really good job

    peep your Private Messager

    PEACE AND GODBLESS
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  15. illpoetical

    illpoetical raising the bar everyday

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    very descritpive and beautiful poem. i liked the flow and feel of it. i always like your work. very tight stay up.
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