Just Listen

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  1. MissChevious

    MissChevious New Member

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    In the mist of my presence I stand alone
    A storm cloud over my head
    My misery showers down on me in the form of raindrops
    Im lonely.....

    I walk around with head hung low
    Shoulders slouched
    Not wanting to look towards the sky
    Because I feel as if my Father has casted me away
    My feet are to heavy to move
    and the weights of my burdens around my ankles are not helping

    Im emotionally- unstable......
    I close my eyes and I see....

    Words being shot @ me like bullets

    Don't do this
    Stop doing that
    You'll never be this
    You need to do that ......

    Damn would you all just Shut the Fuck Up....

    Look at me, Im falling apart
    Physically .... Im tired
    Emotionally....Im exhausted

    Will you ever listen to me ?
    Will you ever try to understand me ?

    Im drowning in my own tears
    and you cant hear my blood curdling Screams?
    you cant hear my desprate pleas for help ?
    You cant hear Me?
    You
    Cant
    Hear
    Me ?

    Well Shut ya damn mouth and Listen ....
    Can you hear me Now?
    Can you hear me now ?

    when will you learn to stop judging me and start helping Me?
    When will you stop lecturing and start teaching me?
    When will you stop scolding me and start Praising Me?

    These are questions that I often ask
    But no one ever hears them....

    So here I stand ..Under my cloud
    Being Drenched in my own tears
    Being choked by my own pain


    Just because......You're Not Listening......
    test
  2. MissChevious

    MissChevious New Member

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    ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^up?
    test
  3. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    If I could quote the whole piece, I would, but I'm not the type to do that. This explained to me what I needed to be explained about what you may be going through, the title states, "Just Listen" and that's exactly what you were trying to get people doing. This drop fits the title, because emotion needs to be unleashed and ofcourse someone always has to be at the end of your voice to respond to the problems, try and relate, try and correspond with you about the difficulties they went through. Nice joint here, mos def. My blessings.
    test
  4. mocha_licious

    mocha_licious New Member

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    i like your style...

    keep writin ...u got talent...


    ~big ups~
    test
  5. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    lovin what your bringing to the realm

    this piece was straight fire

    lovin it from top to bottom

    lovin the intro the best

    In the mist of my presence I stand alone
    A storm cloud over my head
    My misery showers down on me in the form of raindrops
    Im lonely.....

    dope

    very nice...loved how u put this piece together

    upin for more replies
    test
  6. Poetical Techniquez

    Poetical Techniquez Lost in Thought

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    well lets see herre umm... i see u still have your write'in touch..a bit rusty but most definately u have'in lost your touch...full of energy and emotion...simple yet effective-classic u...don't u damn stop write'in no more
    test
  7. reload

    reload New Member

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    Thanks love, for dropping this poem. I understand and relate to this 100%! I know how you feel when the people you want most to listen to you don't. It hurts pretty bad. But anyway, I loved the poem. Mad love on this one.
    Keep writing and posting cuz I'll be reading and responding.
    test
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