Just a product of boredom

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  1. Precious1

    Precious1 ReLoved, ReVamped, ReBorn

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    Tongues wrapped around lips
    Not here but….


    There.
    Feel me in ways that sketch pictures behind your eyes
    Dance with me in a horizontal position
    As I like you into submission
    Sweat drenched body covers mine and in time
    We intertwine and our souls become divine
    Slippery when wet.
    I try to not forget how you like it when I
    touch you.
    Love listening to the way you say my name and cry
    in sexsational sinsations.
    Inside your warmth I feel comfort and become intoxicated off the taste of you.
    I'm your feign doing anything to get high
    off of you.
    I'll do anything you want me to do.
    I'll lick you here and touch you there and
    kiss you where your mositure flows freely.
    Inside you,
    I want you to feel me.
    Become one with me and drip for me.
    Feel me as I fill you with the tip of me.
    Your intrigued at the way I fit so perfectly into you.
    Like perfection matched with excellence.
    In unision you and I expereince the highest form of ecstasy.
    When I'm with you is the only time
    I'm completely free.
    test
  2. eatemup

    eatemup New Member

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    liked the imagery in this and the flow was tight you did a good job on this
    test
  3. unspoken1

    unspoken1 Revolutionary Wordsmen

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    definitly...the imagery was nice....you painted a vivid picture with your words man....nicely done
    test
  4. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    beautiful scribe right here precious..very visual for me...like the way ukinda stayed on the edge but didnt get 2 ingrosed in the subject

    nice
    test
  5. Nebulaz

    Nebulaz fear God, not man

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    "Love listening to the way you say my name and cry
    in sexsational sinsations."

    nice play off of the words here, very creative. the detail you were able to infur from this with the vague euphenisms was great. most sexual poems get written off this same way so the overall effect was kinda lost on me b/c of this but not the less a great piece.
    test
  6. Precious1

    Precious1 ReLoved, ReVamped, ReBorn

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    Thanks for the words
    test
  7. illpoetical

    illpoetical raising the bar everyday

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    very nice and the imagery was good, i liked it alot
    test
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