just a friend

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  1. unspoken1

    unspoken1 Revolutionary Wordsmen

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    who would hav thought that a moment would destroy your soul
    not an arguement
    not even a complaint
    but simply listening to another person
    i sat and heard the story you needed to tell because im your friend
    hiding the pain that it caused when i found out that you were in love
    but not with me
    hiding the tears that i wanted to cry from you just so i could be there in your time of need
    with every word you spoke it felt as if a little of me started to crumble
    "i love him so much"
    those words nearly killed me
    but i stayed strong for you
    because when i looked in your eyes i saw nothing but sadness
    and for me to tell you how i really felt would only bring more pain to your life
    and i would rather die than watch you go through anything more
    even though it hurts more than i ever could imagine
    i will continue to be there for you
    as a friend
    test
  2. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    DOPE

    but honestly i think this could be better.....the concept it dope....i could run wild with this.....would be real tight if u collabed with a female on this and she gave her perspective....think i'll go write somethin now....lol

    hiding the pain that it caused when i found out that you were in love
    but not with me

    nice lines

    lol in a way it reminds me of 112s song called letter or some shit....

    nice drop like always...

    UP
    test
  3. UFO the Phoenix

    UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS!

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    This was good

    I think we all can relate to something like this situration no doubt...at least I can

    Very hard

    This was nice...could of been organized a little better lyrically....but I'm finding out not everything in poems have to rhyme so thats cool

    And this did flow well got your point across and all

    I think you should tell her how you really feel before somebody gets hurt ya know?...although if you do tell her it could ruin a good friendship or make things weird?...so I dunno thats actually a tough one to call

    do what you feel is best

    Aight stay up

    PEACE AND GODBLESS
    test
  4. Craccer_Jacc

    Craccer_Jacc SudAnillyst

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    who this was a nice piece fahreal i have been there and am there now i know the emotions far to well i love it ......²²²²ings new hope

    peace and stay builden
    test
  5. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    I'm going through this right now, I wish the feelings were directed at me, although she is in love with someone else. I think it's changing between her and I, but I'll never know until she actually tells me. I related to this too much, especailly..

    "i sat and heard the story you needed to tell because im your friend
    hiding the pain that it caused when i found out that you were in love
    but not with me"


    Amazing concept, yet could've been better, I agree with the other's feed. Overall though, a piece worth remembering. My blessings..
    test
  6. *GeMiNeYeZ*

    *GeMiNeYeZ* ~§¤Sweet Shinobi¤§~

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    sounds like a story a friend of mine told me about his love life today... he's in love with her and she knows... but she told him that she could only have him as a friend and nothing more... man... this would hit home for him, great job.
    test
  7. unspoken1

    unspoken1 Revolutionary Wordsmen

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    wow thanks for the replies......yea i know it could hav been better but if i didnt write it when i did i would hav felt awful for a long time.....i just had to get the feeling out
    test
  8. Atmosphera

    Atmosphera New Member

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    Poetry Is A Beautiful Excuse For Release.

    This Was Gripping & Innocent Its Hard To Put A Piece Down And Try And Go Back Raw Emotions Are The Best To Flow With

    Nice Work
    test
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