It's a shame I can't maintain my damn frame of mind..

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  1. pAusE™

    pAusE™ Who we be?

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    It's a shame I can't maintain my damn frame of mind,
    Entailed in rhyme procrastinating effortlessly with beauty,
    Only the soul can withhold such imagery undying heath of waning taper,
    The vehicle doesnt move, in a suboordinate direction momentarily.

    stutter, like a damaged wing in my lost soul,
    of absolute obscurity in a democratic state of patience,
    the journey progresses, enveloping itself like a cocoon of eternal security, many times gone and wondering descriminately throughout my long subsidary dreams,

    Flowing not without pace but rather with accuracy like a pin through a sheeps eye of instability,
    Stroking my heart, I lay awake in an elaborate landscape of inner truth.

    So what do ya think ²²²²²'s?
    test
  2. pAusE™

    pAusE™ Who we be?

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    sup y'all
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  3. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    I enjoyed this piece. Especially the imagery and metaphors used in, because they just sunk in, while I was placing all the missing pieces to really feel what you were getting at and the true meaning behind it. I thought you had somewhat of a voice, although at times, it was the poem that spoke to me, not exactly you. Which isn't a bad thing at all, just noticed that. Overall, a very well written piece, family. My blessings..

    *return the favor by dropping some knowledge on my piece.

    http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?s=&threadid=575322
    test
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