Intro to my mind

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  1. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

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    ftr, the longer lines arent stretched, i intend to switch the flow up there.

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    I'm like the list of WWE greats, I aint gotta Jack Swagger
    I T.a.C attack bastards, knife in hand, i laugh at her
    As i stab her man Jasper to see who's lung collapse faster
    I'm backwards, an alter boy who attacks Pastors
    If they touch my hand I snap their wrist in half
    Quick and fast with a precision grasp, rip it off and give him daps
    The Man should listen, man, this is where i kidnapped Kristen at
    Attached her to the trailor hitch to drag, painted her white and inflated her like The Michelin Man
    She cant say No if shes drugged up if you wanna make this federal
    Dont take me literal? Bitch I'll take you clit-teral
    Let me say this again incase you're a little slow
    Dont take me literal? Bitch I'll take you clit-teral
    Til your little hole dribbles spittle, I hope you hid your clothes
    So they dont get soaked as i lick your toes and stick your middle goal
    If you've got an interest in the sickness, go and sign up
    al-Qaeda, MJ's supplier, leaving your shoes in front of Wynnona Ryder and vaginas are kinda like how my minds fucked

    hook

    this is an intro to my miiiiiiiind
    look around, see what you find
    this is an intro to my miiiiiiiind
    look around, see what you find

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    I know my swag smells of wigga
    But I still tell a wigga, go to hell ya wigga
    I got bucked off that horse but I've fell from bigger
    I'll be found drowned in a well quicker than I'll be locked down in a cell for dinner
    But real deal, I will kill still drill ya grill, I gotta keep it trill, your honor
    For the thrill of the shrill squeels as the blood spills and ya gut's grilled...Jeffrey Dahmer
    She wanna go dumb, so we party like a rockstar
    But now i wanna blow cum, cuz Shorty got my cock hard
    Back to the crib, and all her moaning got me hot, charred
    Blow my whole sack on her lips, in the morning she's getting chopped, scarred
    She knows I'm weird but wants me to be her lover, freak
    Soon she's spilling guts to me, but not how you fuckers think
    If you spit at me with foul breath, I'll bust ya mouth and crush ya teeth
    Killed DJ Khaled cuz All I do is win, what the fucks defeat?
    They say i play insane great, and I must agree
    What? You think the only thing I ever murked was a beat?

    hook

    this is an intro to my miiiiiiiind
    look around, see what you find
    this is an intro to my miiiiiiiind
    look around, see what you find

    verse

    I'm a modern day Travis Bickle
    And I have this pickle
    Should i slash this hag's nipple rip and slash if she acts fickle
    Or grab Lance Bass quick an sick a pitbull on that bitch then shove a shower head up his ass and make a fagsicle
    (Did you hear Gucci and OJ fell out?) I dont give a flying fuck
    I care more about where exactly lightning struck
    And any rapper they're beefing over likely sucks
    Hopefully this means the sooner this fad trap crap might be done
    Come insult me bitch and you'll get scarred quick
    I like sick guitar rifts and large tits on chicks who like to lick hard dicks
    To get personal, so try and get laid to waste
    Attack the great with fakes? I'll skin you and make a mask so we can meet face to face
    I'm on my grind with lines of crime, call me the grime visionary
    Fuck flipping birds, I'll slit canaries, quit rap and make a killing writing rhyme dictionaries
    So you should be tryna quit schemes of lyin to get seen
    Cuz I'll make a blind kid scream and his eyelids bleed and watch with a violent gleam...I'm a psychiatrist's dream

    hook

    this is an intro to my miiiiiiiind
    look around, see what you find
    this is an intro to my miiiiiiiind
    look around, see what you find
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  2. lyricalpriest

    lyricalpriest Rap Games Dawson Creek

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    Aha... T.A.C. one of the few that make me feel murder and soddomy is a pleasent peacefull activity.. hmm :)
    You did something here most open mics don't do, chose a topic stayed on it and gave us a well presented finished product.. some lines where over done on the rhyme scheme aspect but i seen a lot of coo punches and great concepts. very original and creative.. horrorcore genre of text.. in some area's your rhyme schemes were imature for example..

    Dont take me literal? Bitch I'll take you clit-teral
    Let me say this again incase you're a little slow
    Dont take me literal? Bitch I'll take you clit-teral
    Til your little hole dribbles spittle, I hope you hid your clothes
    So they dont get soaked as i lick your toes and stick your middle goal


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    But real deal, I will kill still drill ya grill, I gotta keep it trill, your honor
    For the thrill of the shrill squeels as the blood spills and ya gut's grilled...Jeffrey Dahmer

    not that i didn't likee, but it's the word choice/multi rhyme scheme that makes it too cartoonish..
    great multi's tho, keep working on ur multi's and ur internal rhyme scheme's try to find what ur comfort zone is and build from there..

    let's collab!!! again!
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  3. IAmBenT

    IAmBenT Eat a dick, faggot

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    Flow was great, definitely ill, my type of shit right here,

    the board needs more of this elite source of morbidness.. lol
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  4. Ace the Prophet

    Ace the Prophet A Prophet to the Game

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    "I'm backwards, an alter boy that attacks pastors"

    Haha....sickness. Thought that was probably the best line in the whole piece. The faster lines were cool..maybe you coulda set them up better is my only thing...kinda liked the "clit-eral" part, haha. Maybe you didn't have to repeat it but I liked it. You're always comin' with this horror-murder-fuckandrapebitches type shit, lol..Eminem-like. Think I've told you that before about a few of your pieces. As always, it was good man. Every now and then when I'm reading your pieces I think back to the days of sfsportsfan and how far you've came since then, lol..keep shit up. 1
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  5. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

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    whatsup Ace. lol. fuckin rockies, man. bastards. lol. when i think of my sfsportsfan days i always remember when they told me to start using multis in my battle verses, so i came with "something something something, you've been-a-bum, something something something barely made it over the 75 post minimum". i thought that was the shit at that time. lmao. thanks for peeping. we need to collab again.




    lmfao @ lp "the one person who makes murder and sodomy seem like a peaceful experience".

    thanks for reading people. big four-way collab?
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  6. lyricalpriest

    lyricalpriest Rap Games Dawson Creek

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  7. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

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    we should do some morbid shit. all four of us. see who can come the most fucked up.
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