inspired and tired

Discussion in 'Poetry Realm' started by e'S, Jun 4, 2003.

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  1. e'S

    e'S sdrowkcab mi kool

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    so much delight
    reminds
    me of a twilight
    at midnight
    with no exsiting sunlight
    leaving me to see nothing
    but insight
    and clouds
    produced by my windpipe
    breeze from the lips of question
    e'stranged from the things im waiting to see
    from memories of yesternever
    troubled waters laying in puddles
    im doing heardels over opticals under talks i hold
    more to view
    no more illusions
    hold my breath
    and words sound familiar
    and unconfusing
    left motionle'ss i begin to move
    like my once spoken on
    seventh never sense
    heavenly forgotten sentiments
    played softly through imaginary instruments
    along the side of the galaxy wallpaper
    test
  2. Lyme

    Lyme Guest

    beautiful.. damn I really did love it all.. n' wanna hear it :)

    goodmornin .. goodafternoon .. talk 2 U soon
    test
  3. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    Rhyme scheme and flow were your strongest poetic devices within the aspects you had used. I found this piece decent and it helps to inspire others to write more, because once readers hear an inspiration of a writer, then they begin to write themselves more, basically. It influences them. Nice piece, family. My blessings..
    test
  4. vinous

    vinous New Member

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    troubled waters laying in puddles
    ^^^^
    love that line
    test
  5. skandelous_lala

    skandelous_lala back from the dead

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    beautifully written...the choice of words were awesome...great job.
    test
  6. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    and clouds
    produced by my windpipe
    breeze from the lips of question

    loved that...flow was amazing....loved how u put this together...

    keep doing ya thang...up
    test
  7. e'S

    e'S sdrowkcab mi kool

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    glad you all looked it
    i try to do stuff you and i can dig
    ipoet
    skan...
    vinous
    tuned
    and of course the lightwith a hint of lyme
    i guess i can read it out loud one time
    test
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