Insomnia

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  1. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    INSOMNIA

    Light shines down
    Right now
    In dreamscapes
    We fake
    Lies in the existence
    of
    Time in these rhythmic old
    minds
    That can see us,
    Be us in an instant
    Subconscious rears us
    Close in an instant,
    I
    Used to think sleeping
    Was neither being
    Awake or dead
    Born of breath
    The
    Faith of a mustard seed
    I
    Know that the
    Subconcious awakes
    When the conscious
    is away
    For
    Memories and Reveries
    Reverberating past lives
    Try
    Not to deny
    The reality of dreams
    Reality of screams
    Reality of scenes
    I see that reality
    And that reality is me
    Frightfully crying
    The insanity
    Is prying
    Through the thousands of eyes
    We perceive
    Can perceive the real me
    Can't perceive the real he
    So my life isn't fair
    Body is revealed
    Seeing my life isn't there
    I fear
    The Dreams
    Distance existence
    Draws near
    Sinful Repentance
    Is clear
    Living like
    Death is the goal
    Living
    in a warm bed
    But I'm breathlessly cold
    And I awake
    Exhausted
    from Nightmares of reality
    I'm scared of what's happening
    From there to the saddening
    I am pinched by love
    But still kicked by somber
    Moods that wander
    Through the tears of the thousandth Eye
    Tears of a thousand cries
    I drown when I deny
    So many lies
    And my
    Dreams
    Awaken them
    And reveal my true soul

    To Heaven...​

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    Just a li'l keystyle. I waited too long. A post was needed.
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  2. Jen Li

    Jen Li New Member

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    *is speachless*
    this was jus like.... Damn...
    the imagary was incredible
    flowed great..
    this was off the chain fo realz
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  3. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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  4. *GeMiNeYeZ*

    *GeMiNeYeZ* ~§¤Sweet Shinobi¤§~

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    ...wow...

    you've got to be one of the best poets i know of... everything i've read from u was wonderful and this is no different... wow...
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  5. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    Thanks, Gem! Congrats on ya b'day!
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  6. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    Shit really dont even know what to say about this piece. But i know this is one of my favorites from you now....Great talent man...

    one luv
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  7. Anonmuz

    Anonmuz Decepticons = Truth

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    this is some tight deep and true shit, i'm feeling this to the fullest. dope post, you got a fan. pz.
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  8. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    A very indepth piece in what you were trying to tell us. Kept the attention of the reader throughout the piece. The imagery, as said was breathtaking and very detailed. The metaphores/similies barely need work, although could've used a bit more from my point of view. I believe this poem has already influenced me to read some more of your written work held on rapmusic.com. My blessings..
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  9. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    http://blacksoultan2.tripod.com/contents.html
    http://blacksoultan2.tripod.com/contents2.html

    The second page I'm still working on. It's a copy of the first page with some new poems added, so some of the poems are repeated on the second page.

    Thanks for the love, y'all.
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  10. varentao

    varentao New Member

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    I sunk into the picture, though could not write. As it all just kept flowing in my mind, yet couldn't/wouldn't come out, and i didn't want to 'spoil' it..(don't ask..)...

    ...so when i read this piece...it hit many chords in its own right...

    complemented the picture in such a smooth, flowing and in depth way..²²²²inging with it an 'edge' that...well...enabled the words n depth of it to, well...sink...(aye, sink is the right word) into one's mind...in a kind of fleeting yet effective way...it almost echoed one could say...er, so...have i lose you yet?...

    ...enough said,

    ..resp...
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  11. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    Wow. Thanks, dawg.

    resp.
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  12. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    The way it reads it sounds like an open mic joint...I say memorize, and pull. I looked at that picture when I posted and insomnia was the last thing on my mind.
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  13. The Real Nick

    The Real Nick New Member

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    Very nice. You put that picture to good use.

    Later...
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  14. MISSKEYdaQUEEN

    MISSKEYdaQUEEN Watch the black panther..

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    "I'm scared of what's happening
    From there to the saddening
    I am pinched by love
    But still kicked by somber
    Moods that wander
    Through the tears of the thousandth Eye
    Tears of a thousand cries
    I drown when I deny
    So many lies
    And my
    Dreams
    Awaken them
    And reveal my true soul

    To Heaven..."



    The ending to this is so conlusive....I mean...you know how some endings may inadvertantly(sp?) leave you hanging...you made it so complete!

    I love your work Black..I haven't peeped the realm in a while..but I see it's gotten better in here!

    I enjoyed the imagery throughout this piece!!!
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  15. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    Wow, thanks guys. It means a lot to me.
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  16. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    what I don't get is eighty views, fourteen replies.
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  17. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    I know exactly what you mean...or someone will reply and say..."That was deep" lol
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  18. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    thats actually a good amount, id be happy with that....

    ive been really feeling your stuff lately.....it has the most amazing rhythm and flow too it.......this piece didnt make me say wow or damn like some of your other pieces, but it was still a good piece :)

    peace and blessings
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  19. SIZZLA

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    aged wine....
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  20. SIZZLA

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    up
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