Injustice

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  1. DaJackle

    DaJackle ThoughtS ProcessinG

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    this is just a going vent to realease the emotions out of me...kinda early in the morning but i needed it

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    the burning flames that are my eyes
    that are tainted with hate-drops
    from every word that's transfigurated
    through your rigid-surfaced tounge

    through the illusions of blank smiles
    where a little bit sparks a volcano of fury
    to your judgments of right and wrong
    injustice in your words
    in your fake noble acts and deeds
    injustice in your darkened-hazel eyes
    the eyes of the darkside of a stars
    where you shun the mellifluous flow
    of warmth and vivid light of dreams
    injustice to the very thoughst of you

    my shaky hands sear the mark
    of a vengeful heart; dark-brown eyes
    with dillating intentions to protect;
    chocolate skin that labels
    the identity of a loving mind
    yet, the sight of you
    the sound of you
    trembles the key to open the valve
    of agitated emotions
    deep in a forgotten part of my mind
    forgotten
    for I am through playing
    with the puzzling games of time
    through negotiating with anger and envy
    and loneliness and the pain of lies
    i am sick of it all, and i could see
    right through you
    clear as the glacial waters
    clear as the icy heart that you carry
    inside your frozen chest
    a coldness that ablazes my blood streams
    to boil with unmitigated rage
    to explode leaving the scent of
    burnt meat and skin in the presence of you
    if it wasnt for my love
    the north star in my life
    i am afraid of the evil i could do
    the lurking thoughts that triggers
    the bullet to your injustice mindset
    but a simple vent
    a few words and her voice
    will prove that you
    are just an obstacle
    a hatefull illusion
    of what true love
    really is
    test
  2. Blunted Reality

    Blunted Reality Still Blunted on Reality

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    Beautiful piece man...I could definitely feel your heart and soul in this...well done. Keep it up.
    test
  3. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    wow...this is straight fire...by far my fav piece so far this morning....great job..i'd quote but i dont think it would do the rest of the piece justice...great job...liked it so much i read it twice..lol..UP
    test
  4. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    "i am afraid of the evil i could do"

    ^i know exactly how you was feelin when you wrote that line. Something that scares me. Good drop

    one luv
    test
  5. DaJackle

    DaJackle ThoughtS ProcessinG

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    thanks for the replies guys, i needed to release the anger said i didnt know what to say, i just had to write it down
    test
  6. MisterEThoughts

    MisterEThoughts MysteryOfUntoldTruth

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    damn this is soo pretty i seriously pictured my self writing this definitely my style very nice and beautiful keep it up maybe we do a collab together or something peace.
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  7. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    i wish i could have written the way you do when i was your age.......nice flow, beautiful use of language and i really felt the last few lines......

    stay up man.......maybe i will take you to see lion king on ice soon ;)
    test
  8. DaJackle

    DaJackle ThoughtS ProcessinG

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    thanks for the replies...im glad you all enjoyed it :)
    test
  9. SAMARA

    SAMARA truth is a sword

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    Good drop.
    test
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