~In Love With A White Woman~

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  1. Bhitiah

    Bhitiah Powerful Scriptures

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    *sigh*.... I love your writing, I honestly do.


    "pray to
    a god...?
    no...
    gotta face these demons
    on my own..."

    I know about that...The way I took it at least, Man that hits hard. I wanna talk to god too, but, like...I wanna do it alone, by myself, I gotta know that I can do it alone before I can put my trust into someone else, If I have doubts of myself why am I gonna put the other end of this rope in his hand?


    "no remorse to
    hold...
    rolling paper taken
    from pages of the bible...
    smoking away a belief that
    was lied to you..." <<that's the sickness..lol



    "I
    came back to you
    cause i knew...
    you loved taking
    lives...
    loving you is caressing
    suicide...
    loving you is putting my
    past behind...
    not from a
    pen...but
    through this
    syringe...
    a cowards
    revenge...
    my only way to face the
    pain from
    within...."
    ^^^
    I know about that too...*dies*...I love your work, Your an amazing writer and you take my breath away everytime you write, I'm like OH! SHIT!...lol....

    Stay up.
    test
  2. Poetickz

    Poetickz The Humble One

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    lmao, i jus realised you were talkin about drugs, not women, lmao....it can still relate to it though...lmao...the ungrateful women is my drug then. lmao
    one
    test
  3. Santa Calhoun

    Santa Calhoun HoHoHosCheckMyKingassFro

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    just say no to white women
    they kill
    nice work
    test
  4. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    "rolling paper taken
    from pages of the bible...
    smoking away a belief that
    was lied to you..."

    man that just says it all right there, lol at people still thinking this was about a white women, I thought the metiphor was really easy to get...but then again I'm use to looking past the title of a piece and seeing it as a mmetaphor, cause I do it all the time with my own pieces..

    But man this was tight, Took me a while to respond to it... but i read it once you posted it


    Stay Up, Much Love, Peace
    test
  5. 49th Prophet

    49th Prophet Dark Magic Inferno

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    I liked it and all, was feelin it and everything, I mean Ive had "experiences" with drugs n shit, but I just couldnt take this as seriously as I should have, the damn title made me laugh when I saw it. I get your concept, and this keystyle is an awesome anology for sure...but still, I find the title too funny to get serious when I read it...

    much love

    peace
    test
  6. Natty LoCs

    Natty LoCs RIP "Pud"

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    i loved it.....very nice piece....lovin alot of lines to many to quote..but it was sick drop
    test
  7. unspoken1

    unspoken1 Revolutionary Wordsmen

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    yo this is definitly nice...i was feeling it...i like the metaphor...actually i like the whole thing....nicely done
    test
  8. 6th_plague

    6th_plague More then meets the eye

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    rolling paper taken
    from pages of the bible...
    smoking away a belief that
    was lied to you..."

    That was the highlight of it. Nice peice though It does bring me to doubt your deffinition of freestyle this is a dope peice. Since Im pessamisitic I'll have to point out the only real let down which was the line

    ''loving you is caressing
    suicide...''

    Pretty 'played' and I thought would have been the start of a rott on this poem when I read it but na, shit was nice...

    Nice to see you still dropping once in a while
    test
  9. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    lol i see i caught some people off guard.

    appreciate the love people

    one luv
    test
  10. MISSKEYdaQUEEN

    MISSKEYdaQUEEN Watch the black panther..

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    hey..this was great

    felt the title and the hidden meaning...which really wasnt very hidden to me but....

    I like this piece man

    Do yo thang, you know the deal shiot!lol
    test
  11. DaJackle

    DaJackle ThoughtS ProcessinG

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    lol i was wondering how the tell will play in the piece...i find the ending to be homurous myself..dunno if anyone else found it....but this was short and sweet...loved the short phrases....gave a tone of hesitation just like an addict would...this is my favorite lines...


    rolling paper taken
    from pages of the bible...
    smoking away a belief that
    was lied to you...


    // loved that section..very clever
    test
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