" I'm not nothing... "

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  1. Definit_

    Definit_ P0ETiiCLiiCHE'

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    I’m not a rapper
    I’m a self-centered
    Preservative low-life
    Scared that with no mic,
    I won’t be heard

    Couching my transparent words
    Just to make it to one ear
    …no desire to reach, too tired to speak
    So I write


    But,


    I’m not a poet
    I’m a thoughtless
    Narrow-minded time waste
    w/ nothing better to do,
    Then to daze on a white page

    Finding something in my soul
    I’d consider whole, to just write about
    …seeing my transparent words
    Won’t get my point across
    On what I love


    But,


    I’m not a lover
    I’m a generalized male
    Who’d rather be chasing a relation,
    Then a relation-ship

    Cruising the ocean of your tears
    My emotion showing no fears
    Cum to think about it,
    … I guess we really do think w/ our penis
    I'm not so friendly huh?


    But,


    I’m not a friend
    I’m a back-stabbing
    Friend dapping, 2 faced impersonator.
    Smiling beside of them
    Trusting them just, never the devil inside of them.

    Swimming in holy water
    Hoping it holds me harder, under it
    Drowning my past life as a present for the future
    to believe


    But,


    I’m not a Christian
    I’m a saved atheist
    Believing in everything but myself
    Preaching the word of poetry
    To god, seeing his translucent mind
    Won’t criticize mine.


    Damn,


    I couldn’t find myself
    w/ a navigated mirror,
    that mapped out my entire life in chronological order.

    I guess I really am...truly not...nothing.



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  2. kstroyer

    kstroyer New Member

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    Very complete piece..i like the concept and really enjoyed reading.. fav line

    I’m not a lover
    I’m a generalized male
    Who’d rather be chasing a relation,
    Then a relation-ship


    Found my self to be the same way till I found the one who made me think about changing.. stay up.
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  3. Bhitiah

    Bhitiah Powerful Scriptures

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    This whole peice was hot, I really liked this...
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  4. absolute zero

    absolute zero Among the living

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    ^^^ Agreed, but I'll tell you why.

    Your pieces remind me of something I would write.

    "I’m not a poet
    I’m a thoughtless
    Narrow-minded time waste
    w/ nothing better to do,
    Then to daze on a white page"

    I'm always hesitant to call myself a "poet" because it could be such a broad or narrow term. I like those kinds of stanzas that break out and just say "No, this is not me." It's almost like a confession, but it only strengthens the writer. I dunno if you understand. Just my thoughts.

    Stick around. Nice reading your stuff.

    Bless.
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  5. Poetic Concept

    Poetic Concept New Member

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    This is really nice, I ve read the other responses and they sum it up pretty well I think that ur talented and I would like to hear more from u your ideas r so complete and vividly expressionistic. Nice job...keep writing.

    Return the favor on NEWEST MATERIAL
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  6. Definit_

    Definit_ P0ETiiCLiiCHE'

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    Appreciated.


    Pz.
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  7. flaco_rivera

    flaco_rivera Nicaragua Brown

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    good read its longer than it looks which is good. it looks so short from far away, good word usage...i'll be lookin forward reading more from you.
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  8. Definit_

    Definit_ P0ETiiCLiiCHE'

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    Appreciated..

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    Pz.
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  9. Definit_

    Definit_ P0ETiiCLiiCHE'

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