I'm addicted

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  1. zXFreeStyleXz

    zXFreeStyleXz R Unit

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    Before you I had no passion in life, except scars on the flesh like the passion of christ, so many tears, could have been the activist type, but never spoke up when I was in an actual fight, guess I choked up, there went my freedom of speech, they say it pays to be strong, but it's free to be weak, love was the key, never thought I'd get that though, now I'm seeing X's & O's like its tic tac toe, love is real, and really it don't get that old, and if it does, shes there when times get that low, god made her perfect, heaven sent to protect, a fallen with clipped wings drinking a pepsi (all I got so far)
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  2. Spoken~Silence

    Spoken~Silence New Member

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    this was awesome!!

    nice flow, nice punches.....keep up the creative juices.....
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  3. nO gOoD!

    nO gOoD! Life Music :: Press Play

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    this was dope. one of the best I've seen on here in a while.
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  4. GaLaTeA

    GaLaTeA Well-Known Member

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    Impressive...:props:
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  5. Insanevillian

    Insanevillian STILL in CHARGE

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    im feeling the flow... im gonna repost your verse here in the thread in a more traditional prose sooo peeps wont hate


    Before you I had no passion in life,
    except scars on the flesh like the passion of christ,
    so many tears, could have been the activist type,
    but never spoke up when I was in an actual fight,
    guess I choked up, there went my freedom of speech,
    they say it pays to be strong, but it's free to be weak,
    love was the key, never thought I'd get that though,
    now I'm seeing X's & O's like its tic tac toe,
    love is real, and really it don't get that old,
    and if it does, shes there when times get that low,
    god made her perfect, heaven sent to protect,
    a fallen with clipped wings drinking a pepsi (all I got so far)
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    overall a good piece... would like to see the finished product
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  6. K0mPleX

    K0mPleX New Member

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    great flow..I just found near the end it got choppy, but i understand its not the finished product. Great flow. Natural
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  7. dsp2k5

    dsp2k5 Dime Sack Pimp

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    nicely done ...
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  8. DopeHopes

    DopeHopes KS [NC9]

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    Very nice, only part that stuck out was the X's O's tic tac toe, other than that it had great flow, and lyrics.
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