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  1. Anidawehi

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    A Girl who wore a crown atop her little head approached me
    and did not cease to stare
    she asked me, "Are you a King?"
    And with reluctant feeling, I replied by reason of pity,
    "Why for you, sweetheart, I'll be anything,"
    but only a Queen would know the true answer
    to your question, without question.
    With that I rid of the wilted soul
    who called her luck a blessing
    and misread my mask as my face
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  2. ~S*T*A*R*M~

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    I liked that! The more I read it, the more I read into it.. it unfolds something new to me each time. Good work =)

    What was your inspiration for this peice?
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  3. Anidawehi

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    It's about an ex who saw what she wanted to see and heard what she wanted to hear.

    Glad you enjoyed it though. Thanks for takin the time out to read it and reply.
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  4. ~S*T*A*R*M~

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    And it's not about the speaker's willingness to let her misread into the situation?
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  5. Anidawehi

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    It's not about who's to blame.
    Here I'll break the poem down....

    "A Girl who wore a crown atop her little head approached me
    and did not cease to stare
    she asked me, "Are you a King?"
    And with reluctant feeling, I replied by reason of pity,
    "Why for you, sweetheart, I'll be anything,"

    [This part is actually a metaphor for a woman who asked the man for a relationship. "Are you a King?" = "Do you love me?" By reason of pity he answered "Yes" instead of saying no and destroying her.]

    "but only a Queen would know the true answer
    to your question, without question."

    [Here, the man is making it clear that he does not truly love her. He knows that she is not the "one" for him. She knows this as well and just wants to hear the words.]]


    "With that I rid of the wilted soul
    who called her luck a blessing
    and misread my mask as my face"

    [The girl saw what she wanted to see in him and he told her what she wanted to hear. He knew that if he told her the truth it would crush her soul, so he lied to her knowing full well that she knew he was lying and simply "chose" to believe it, regardless.]

    Sometimes people choose the lie over the truth, because the truth hurts.
    (In many different forms, not just love)
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  6. quotive

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    ^ Didn't know you wrote poetry.

    Interesting break down man..
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  7. lpoet

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    interesting...i like the backwardness of this poem( if that even makes sense) you have to sort of digest this..you cant just let it sit...nice

    i was worried for a second..sort of felt rkellyish to me..lmao
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  8. skandelous_lala

    skandelous_lala back from the dead

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    I like this piece much more with the breakdown included...it gives it more depth then what I initially read into it. Quite interesting.
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  9. Anidawehi

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    hahaha

    Nah, she was actually 2 years older than me.
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  10. FreakEmoWriter9

    FreakEmoWriter9 New Member

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    hmm interesting...very interesting....it took me about two or three times to finally get the point of your piece, and the breakdown just basically cleared up the rest of my questions haha. I loved how this WHOLE poem is a metaphor, and basically a lesson for how the truth can be just that very painful.
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  11. Bhitiah

    Bhitiah Powerful Scriptures

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    I've actually read this a few times, Never quite sure what to make of it though. It was short, I dont like short poems, It was...Just something I particularly wanted to read.

    But, Lala is right...With the breakdown included it's much more interesting.

    And now, I do like it. Stay up. Post more often.
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  12. Anidawehi

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    Appreciate the replies...

    Wow, 10 hits and I haven't been posting poems for a long minute.
    Not too shabby.
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  13. quotive

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    ^ go reply to other peoples stuff

    with your black body odor hating ass, lol
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  14. Anidawehi

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    I replied to yours...
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  15. Bhitiah

    Bhitiah Powerful Scriptures

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    You know technically your peice has 6-7 real replies, so I wouldnt get to stoked up on the idea that people are mega replying to your poems. If you want to actually have TEN real replies Quotive's right you need to reply to other people instead of constantly upping your own poem.

    Not trying to be a bitch, Just pointing it out.
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  16. Anidawehi

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    Stoked up?

    I was just stating that the thread reached 10 replies.
    I'm used to seeing them only get 4 or 5 and then die out like the last poem I posted which can be found on page 2.

    I do read other people's poems.
    I just don't see any point in repeating what somebody else has already said.
    Half the time people are just repeating what another person before them said.

    I didn't post the poem for the replies, I posted it so yall can read it.
    I was just acknowledging those who acknowledged it.
    Yall need to relax, it's the Realm.
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  17. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    I had no fucking clue what this was a bout untill you broke it down... well let me clarify a bit. I understood the deception that was in this piece the game playing... the lies and truths, but really got confused. In away it sort of makes the girl seem like less then the guy in the piece, like he is mightier. Maybe that was just some of the word usage. Anyways this was an ok piece, straight to the point.


    Stay Up, Much Love, Peace
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  18. Anidawehi

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    Thanks for takin the time out to read and reply to it...

    I'll keep an eye out for your work.
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  19. MISSKEYdaQUEEN

    MISSKEYdaQUEEN Watch the black panther..

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    nice job man! I didn't read your breakdown....but I like my interpretation of it,lol

    I'll go back and read yours.
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  20. Anidawehi

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    Glad you liked it MissKey
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