~If Tomorrows Were Yesterdays~

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  1. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    "roses die each time i look
    at them..."


    Damn, now that is deep. I loved that line, just jumped out at me for some reason, hit me, basically. Overall, a great voice, like usual.. Unbelievable delivary, like usual.. Just a great piece, like usual.. I really dig your style and poetic feel, because it's true and real. No real fake type emotions, just what you have on your mind, in your heart, you write about it and it's whenever YOU want, not whenever someone else wants. I enjoy your Poetry, mos def. My blessings..
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  2. varentao

    varentao New Member

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    This was hard hitting. In a downbeat, own personal way sense.

    Imagery really bought this alive along with your 'voice' as a poet...it kept me reading in an effortless kind of way...

    nicely done...very much so...

    ...nothing else to say, really..but..

    ..resp...
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  3. Johnnie French

    Johnnie French Voodooradio.podomatic.com

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    i write to cushion
    my pain...
    but pain seems to know when i pick up a
    pen, and makes itself
    dormant...
    it finds my heart and
    tortures it...
    i try to keep a smile on my face,
    but if you look in my eyes you can tell i cant
    ignore it...
    my body, i wish i could step inside and
    explore it...
    seek what's killin my spirit and
    control it...

    and

    Today i stepped into a hall of mirrors
    and asked each and every one of me...
    which one was truly
    me...
    they all stared
    and began to cry uncontrollably...
    i started to drown in the
    river of tears that ran
    so endlessly...

    I really do appreciate your poetry alot because it's just like how I write. While reading this piece I'm sitting here thinking 'yeah I would have said that, yeah that line is how I would envision it'. Very beautiful piece I truly did enjoy reading it. Definately one of my favs I have read here ever.
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  4. majak

    majak Flesh Into Gear

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    I really enjoyed this piece well written


    the mirror concept was very dope...I read that out loud a few times..lol
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  5. Cereal_Killer

    Cereal_Killer no ESCAPE

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    If tomorrows were yesterdays
    life and suicide, will still be a part of
    my daily contemplate...

    im glad to be back if im reading damn good material like this, fantastic ending, something i've thought in my head many a times..........well done........
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  6. UnknownLady

    UnknownLady Senior Member

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    Upping this again
    oh yeah when u gonna write to what I sent you huh? Better get on the ball you here me. LOL Upping this ish cause it was da bomb. Good ish

    I am out
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  7. 6ftground

    6ftground BLACKACE/GRIMREADER

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    I took this to the head and came to an conclusion "Unexplainable"..nice very nice.....


    Today i stepped into a hall of mirrors
    and asked each and every one of me...
    which one was truly
    me...
    they all stared
    and began to cry uncontrollably...
    i started to drown in the
    river of tears that ran
    so endlessly...
    i fought my hardest, to emerge back to the surface
    but my might began to weaken
    me...
    test
  8. iceheart

    iceheart The Frozen Poet

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    i got a handful of things i could say like that was great, but i think you already heard em all, so i ain't gonna help you inflate yo ego any more - jk i loved that damn thing it was straight from the heart and that's how it should always be, keep spillin your feelins onto papers and notebook fillins, keep the peace kid

    iceheart
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  9. D.B.

    D.B. Death

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    My life echoes in my
    dreams...
    covering my head with my pillow
    tryin to kill the screams...

    roses die each time i look
    at them...

    ^fav. lines right dere...heartfelt..stay up homie
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  10. misspimp

    misspimp a.k.a KATURAH

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    That was a very very good piece...i mean i was really feelin that....

    i write to cushion
    my pain...
    but pain seems to know when i pick up a
    pen
    ^^^^those were my fav. lines...
    Keep it up...that shit was off the chain for real

    mad love
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  11. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    i want to thank yall for showing me love like this. Neva had this many replies to any of my pieces. This means alot to me thanks

    one luv
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  12. Misty

    Misty Devilish

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    Well i don't know what i'm gonna say that you haven't heard already... I'm really feeling this piece. Very good work.. keep it coming.
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  13. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    I'm readin this again cuz the shit's tight like that.
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