If I Was Time...

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  1. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    If I was time
    I'd be in digital format,
    Wiping my feet at the moons doormat...
    I would've extended
    3 minutes in the earth's rotation
    Before that...
    If I was time...
    I'd be the hour
    You spend standing in line
    To ride the Medusa at 6 Flags
    One more time...
    If I was time,
    You'd never have enough of me,
    And you'd always try to be ahead of me...
    I'd change my name to Rolex
    And tick steadily...
    Constantly...
    Infinitely...
    I'd set you back an hour of your life
    Once every year,
    And make you lose sleep as well...
    If I was time,
    Would you be able to tell
    Even in light or dark spells
    If I was a sundial
    In Alaska?
    Or would you just let me run
    Right past you?
    If I was time...
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  2. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    this was really creative, flowed well. The last three lines where nice, made u sit back and think for sec. Good shit

    one luv
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  3. iconoclast

    iconoclast Guest

    this piece was very unique... and very interesting to read.
    I liked the ending the most, because it leaves you wanting more.
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  4. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    man you always have really good topics :)

    like boon said, this was creative.......you took something and ran with it so to speak.......i like how this was done.......

    peace and blessings


    *we should collab
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  5. Atmosphera

    Atmosphera New Member

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    There Really Is Something About Your Poerty That Keeps Me Replying To Yours.

    I'm Not Sure If Its The Creativity Or The Complex Views You See Things But What I Do Know Is That Its Of None Other Than Your Own.

    Beautiful Script So Soul Reviewing Thought Provoking

    Love It
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  6. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    man..your work makes me laugh...not b/c its not good or funny..but b/c u creative...i'm really feelin your style...

    up up up
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  7. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    Let's do it then.
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  8. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    aim=poetique princess

    msn=slumbeautiful3001@hotmail.com
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  9. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    hey..what's your email...having tech. difficulties trying to get AIM here at work.
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  10. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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  11. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    It's all good...check your email in a few minutes give or take.
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  12. mocha_licious

    mocha_licious New Member

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    i love out of the box pieces and this was one of them...made u think twice about Time relating to us as human beings as l iving and breathing...very classy and original...

    ~one~
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  13. skandelous_lala

    skandelous_lala back from the dead

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    nice..but a smile on my face...one of those things that just make you got hmmmm and give it a thought for a moment. very creative. i like.
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  14. varentao

    varentao New Member

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    Heh.

    Brilliant...

    ..resp...
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  15. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    Flow is always there, as well as a meaning that you always come creative and new with. Different from anyone else here in the Realm with a fundamental feeling towards your Poetic approach. I love your work, because it all makes you think and it's all an original idea. It's not always about heartbreak, yet creating a meaning revolving around a clock. Nice piece, kid. My blessings..
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  16. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    thanx for showin a brotha luv yall. :)
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