If I had the courage...

Discussion in 'Poetry Realm' started by iconoclast, Jun 19, 2003.

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  1. iconoclast

    iconoclast Guest

    Fuck it all, Im talkin to the gun on my lap
    Would and should end it all... just need to relax
    I dont really have anything to live for
    no job, no girl, no goals
    no fun is what my life has become
    thats why Im sitting here, talking to this gun
    no one cares, no one bothers to show love
    no affection in my life, and i wouldnt mind
    if i died tonight
    no one calls, no one writes anymore
    no ones warm, everyone is cold
    the gun is my best friend
    isnt two-faced, wont cheat on me
    would never talk behind my back
    never laugh at me
    I just sit here in a puddle of tears up to my ears
    drowning in my sorrows
    i wonder if anyone would care if i died tomorrow
    no one to tell me what to do
    no one yelling at me, no one drilling me
    fuck you gun... I dont have the guts.. you kill me
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  2. FukkedUPKidR

    FukkedUPKidR Guest

    ...aww...

    i got teary eyed...... cause you were giving me good advice last night pal :)
    this was emotional, and i can relate



    'drowning in my sorrows' ...uh huh...i like it.
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  3. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    all i need in this life of sin, is me and my girlfriend


    heh this is diff. for you......and i liked it......i think youre starting to find your niche as a poet.....keep doing it man :)
    as for the content....i think its something that most people can relate to......stay up eddie i luhs you
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  4. iconoclast

    iconoclast Guest

    thanks pals...i love you both
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  5. weel!

    weel! You're all 14. STFU.

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    dude...i've been in the exact same situation.
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  6. Lyme

    Lyme Guest

    : (

    you have saddened me
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  7. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    I dont really have anything to live for
    no job, no girl, no goals

    that line makes me wanna give u a lecture...lol...but this was a nice lil drop..different from your other drops...but still good...i agree with feme sole that your starting to really find your niche....keep it up...told u before i always enjoy thereads
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  8. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    Yeah...I'm like "muthafucka, if you put that fuckin gun up...." lol I really hope this shit isn't true...I sincerely do. But anyhow, this was a very emotional piece...and I can relate from a different angle.
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  9. iconoclast

    iconoclast Guest

    thanks pals.
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  10. skandelous_lala

    skandelous_lala back from the dead

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    a lot of blunt emotion in this..sad piece....this piece personally enlightens me that its not about having the courage to pull the trigger, but instead the will to live despite everything is always stronger.
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  11. varentao

    varentao New Member

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    This was of course, raw...

    ..but dannae ya know laddeh?! That the gun is always grinning coldly at all...especially the person that holds it...

    ...but yeah, the emotion was there to be seen. A piece that just really came out in it's simple yet still quite deep way.,..

    ..resp...
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