Iconoclast and Feme Sole

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  1. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    quick lil aim collab.......me=pink icono=white


    You were with her last night; I could smell her under your cologne.
    Last night I was alone while you pumped life into someone else.


    I need to feel complete, need to feel whole
    need the warmth that’s missing in your soul
    Need space, need taste, need to feel like it’s my place
    Need to erase your face and live free of mistakes

    Well I guess that’s it then.
    Goodbye.
    I will always keep my head held high. . .
    I’m not the lil docile grrl you once knew.


    Baby, we can work this out, i know we can.
    For 3 years I’ve been there, as a man
    Don’t let one mistake take away 3 years of love, that’s hate
    don’t burn down everything we have worked so hard to create

    I already gave you another chance
    your love had me in a trance
    and I gave in too many times. . .
    but now I wear the pants


    You wanted it to be based on trust
    but I broke it and now I’m stuck
    guess there isn’t anything to do but take it like a man
    sometimes I just don’t think you understand
    how much this meant to me, and what i would do to make it last
    guess I am gonna be thinkin of the past
    just know you count your blessings with your hands behind your back
    and yes, that is absolutely a fact

    You’re right I don’t understand
    because a real man would treat me
    like the queen I am.
    It’s over between us now,
    when I saw you kiss her lips
    it made my stomach sink.
    I know you’re sorry
    I would be too,
    Look at what you’re losing
    But it’s kind of late now don’t you think.
    I hope it was worth it. . .
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  2. iconoclast

    iconoclast Guest

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  3. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    I enjoyed the concept here of this piece. I was feeling how you went back and forth, like a usual relationship gone wrong type situation. I'd love to do collabo with another Poetry Realm member sometime, just in need of a topic. Anyway, overall, a nice, simple piece with a rhyme scheme that was much like an Open Mic from Iconoclast, although the flow was there, at least. As I said, nice piece and I'll be looking out for a few more pieces in the future from you Feme Sole. My blessings..
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  4. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    this was dope, both parts flowed well together. I just wish it was lil longer though. But this was great. Nice chemistry

    one luv
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  5. Blunted

    Blunted straight up

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    [color=666699]Feme, I admire you so much. Youre so strong and I'm glad youre not with Icono anymore cuz he obviously didnt know how to treat you. And it warms me heart to see and hear that youre keeping your head up.. through EVERYthing. Youre really an amazing person, big sis! hehe

    I really liked this though. I always like these kinda concepts with people going back and forth. You guys both did a great job too. This was a real good idea.. whoever came up with it. Good work my peoples. [kissu][/color]
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  6. Trifektah

    Trifektah fiZZee wATer

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    I didn't know Icono got down like that. I'm impressed. Feme I always knew you came with wicked words of wisdom and this is no exception. We should collabo sometime if you're willing to excuse my supreme wackness.
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  7. iconoclast

    iconoclast Guest

    thanks guys

    :)
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  8. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    nice collab u2........

    flowed well together......both had some nice lines...Aim collabs are fun to do...only wish that u had did it a lil longer like mind said...felt like u could have really gone somewhere with this...but still was good....

    feme sole...get at me i always wanted to do like a love poem with a female.....on aim all day...mahgirba.....email is indy_aaron@yahoo.com

    keep it up u2
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  9. Lyme

    Lyme Guest

    awwwwwwww :) cuties
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  10. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    I like the chemistry between you 2...Kinda like Fabolous and Lil Mo...2 different styles that compliment each other. Yall should do one more for the road just to show that it wasn't a "fluke".
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  11. masterragu

    masterragu Sweep The Leg, Johnny!

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    I liked the piece as a whole you definitly both flowed well together

    definitly described a story and had my mind thinking about the situation which is always a good thing

    you guys should post together more often it was a good read

    keep up the good work - ragu
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  12. FukkedUPKidR

    FukkedUPKidR Guest

    Nice work you guys

    Reminds me of a time when I was with someone . . . . . =/ But anyways that's good that this piece has enough strength in it to pull memories out of my mind.

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  13. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    This reminds me of a piece I did with -- well -- myself, actually. Called 10 years to remember. (I ain't have no one to collab wit)

    Very well put together, I liked it.
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  14. MissChevious

    MissChevious New Member

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    VEry Nice collab...It was workin the chemisty between ya'll

    Yall really clicked
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  15. *GeMiNeYeZ*

    *GeMiNeYeZ* ~§¤Sweet Shinobi¤§~

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    wow... that was nice... i'mma do a collab now!
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