As an artist, you need to learn much. See the interesting thing about your feedback is- you are telling what I am thinking and my thought process... as you must believe that you are able to influence ME. lmao, I deal with key individuals as a team- and Group Think is not a paradigm that we implement in any project or mission. As well, you have attempted to tell me what to think with regards to your poem. feedback to the visual image of your poem: Your poem uses less than average wording and structure you are vaguely conveying your poem and the point is construed therefore misleading the audience to think for themselves. However, with a few less words the poem would be a fragmented sentence and therefore reiterates the little thought given to the reader and much interpretation that the audience is left to themselves. this realm is clearly not for you.