I told her I couldn't sleep

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  1. billy nomates.

    billy nomates. rain cancels play.

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    She told me she'd been having nightmares
    I told her she had to stop crying
    And let the dreams turn to clouds
    Where lightning tastes like thunder

    I told her that she had to stop crying
    So the tears couldn't turn to storms
    Where the lightning tastes like thunder
    And the days run like horses

    So the tears wouldn't turn to storms
    I told her to shut her eyes
    And the days would run like horses
    Over hills that stretch the horizon

    I told her to shut her eyes
    And let the dreams turn into clouds
    Over hills that stretch the horizon.
    She told me she'd been having nightmares
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  2. L u c y

    L u c y (Administrator) SWERVE

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    totally you, very "Nom" (in good ways)

    - loved it, made me think of all the times males & females get crossed wires, the way two people can look at the same thing in different ways, the dreamer v the realist etc
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  3. Coup d'état

    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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    i liked this, but too much repetition. could have gave new material each line...that's just me though. good job nom great lineees
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  4. FreshToDeath

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    Great imagery. Very nice.
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  5. TheInkwell

    TheInkwell New Member

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    sup nommy boy!

    i was digging the repetition actually and how the same lines placed somewhere else had a different meaning.

    i was serious about you staying out of the rstl though. seriously, don't come back.

    just kidding, come backk
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