I stand Alone... I want To Walk With Jesus Side By Side

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  1. MisterEThoughts

    MisterEThoughts MysteryOfUntoldTruth

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    I stand alone in pain….
    I stand without anyone to accompany me…..
    I stand alone without a helping hand….
    I stand alone….
    I stand alone to maybe get an offering from a gentle soul…
    I stand alone for maybe a hand to be offered…
    I stand alone for ever I stand…
    I stand alone…..
    I am standing and begging….
    I am hopping for some clarity….
    I am hoping for reality…
    I am hoping this is a dream…
    I hope that when I open up my eyes I will see…
    I would like to see many things…
    Many things might be too much things to ask for…..
    I just don’t want to stand alone anymore…
    I want to have God reach out his hand and take my…
    Leading me to where I pray to be…..
    I always stretch my hand to people I don’t know….
    My hand keeps stretching like a melody of emotional potions….
    Emotional feelings keep stretching its boundaries….
    Keep grieving for GOD to take me away….
    Take me away from a world that is cold and bitter…
    To somewhere where I can be free….
    Free to describe my feelings through circulation of a pen…
    Moving in circular rotation of magnificent opportunity…
    Not being alone…..
    But being with GOD…..
    My eyes open and to my joy I see Jesus taking my hand gladly….
    To a place which is going to be my new home….



    Well, THis just came to me while reading everyones pieces on the realm
    I have a lot of inspirations from everyone on this web site i thank you with all my heart thank you....
    BY THE WAY THIS WAS A KEYSTYLE


    TRYING OUT something different feedbacks are welcome heh thank you all for making me feel at home....
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  2. VeNoM SpItZ

    VeNoM SpItZ grr ... (x_O)

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    tight key mann
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  3. BrokenSoul8604

    BrokenSoul8604 Apparently Emotionless

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    this was ill

    i liked the repitition in the beginning...kept a hold of me and you ended it very beatifully

    Take me away from a world that is cold and bitter…
    To somewhere where I can be free….
    Free to describe my feelings through circulation of a pen…
    Moving in circular rotation of magnificent opportunity…


    liked that line...ill ish...

    Stay up

    God Bless
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  4. MisterEThoughts

    MisterEThoughts MysteryOfUntoldTruth

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    thanks bro mad respect thanks both
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  5. DaJackle

    DaJackle ThoughtS ProcessinG

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    i like the repetition in the morning too...one thing i wish you would have done was elaborate in some ideas and add some images...like when you said "take me" , add an image that answer take me where? what kind of place is it, describe it you know...but since this is key'd, it's in its raw form and it has a lot of potential...good drop man...stayup, peace
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  6. JBB Sports Man

    JBB Sports Man New Member

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    really nice piece, loved the imagery...
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  7. DaJackle

    DaJackle ThoughtS ProcessinG

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    lol not morning, but in the beginning
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  8. MisterEThoughts

    MisterEThoughts MysteryOfUntoldTruth

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    Thank you both yea i see where you coming from da jackal i will next time i do got to work on my discription got to practice on it....
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  9. UFO the Phoenix

    UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS!

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    word...yo I think you did pretty good on this man...I can tell you working on it...this is cool though

    you have your own unique style and voice and it shows in your work

    this is much better and more organize then your last poem I read

    and you know I'm diggin the topic

    stay up

    holla

    PEACE AND GODBLESS
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  10. ~Eloquent

    ~Eloquent Narcissistic....

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    yes thats how i definitely feel about finally being taken under God's wings
    just to be completely free of all that which plagues me today
    very emotional piece
    i look forward to reading more
    peace
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  11. MisterEThoughts

    MisterEThoughts MysteryOfUntoldTruth

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    thanks UFO and eloquent thanks all i am working on it definitely.....
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  12. Kaybi

    Kaybi Guest

    this was dope, i liked the honesty of this and i could relate to this myself, i was feelin the whole thing except im just not a big fan of repetition. keep droppin em man this is ill, especially for a key
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  13. MisterEThoughts

    MisterEThoughts MysteryOfUntoldTruth

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    thanks man mad respect
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  14. MisterEThoughts

    MisterEThoughts MysteryOfUntoldTruth

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  15. nathedawg

    nathedawg New Member

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    applause...

    i once wrote a poem just like this
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  16. MisterEThoughts

    MisterEThoughts MysteryOfUntoldTruth

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    thanks too short haha yea? what you mean like this? like same topic?
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  17. Kaotic33

    Kaotic33 Owns You

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    this was pretty good i thought it was a bit repetitive but u said it was supposed to be like that so its all good
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  18. MisterEThoughts

    MisterEThoughts MysteryOfUntoldTruth

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    yep thanks heh
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  19. MISSKEYdaQUEEN

    MISSKEYdaQUEEN Watch the black panther..

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    dig this piece

    yessiiir..we have all felt like this!
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  20. MisterEThoughts

    MisterEThoughts MysteryOfUntoldTruth

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    thank you lovely
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