I Love You

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  1. Nasty__Ness

    Nasty__Ness The Queen of Topicals

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    I Love You

    So ya want to know the truth…
    “I love you” has lost it’s worth…
    too many times… have I heard, with no response
    no remorse for ya course of action
    has left the words on the tip of my tongue
    spoken with dissatisfaction… they lacking
    ya cloud ya true thoughts…
    ya cloud my true feelings
    just because ya masked the emotions…
    does that make them less true?
    Ya wanna know the truth…
    What the fuck is an “I love you”
    They lost the punch that it had in youth
    “I love you” means…

    too many things…
    too many things…
    too many things…
    Let’s go to bed…
    I’m sorry…
    I’ll never do it again…
    It’s the “would ya shut up” only sugar coated
    Let me tell ya the truth…
    “I love you” don’t mean shit…
    I can call an orange an apple…
    I can say I can fly…
    Tell the world that I am weak…
    Say that in this place is where I belong
    But it doesn’t make it true
    Next time ya wanna speak to me…
    Say it with out the “I love you”
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  2. Swiss Miss

    Swiss Miss New Member

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    Love is very powerful it can do many things to people but you can't ever give up on it. This poem was raging with emotion which is good but I hope you can open your heart again.

    Lauren
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  3. Nasty__Ness

    Nasty__Ness The Queen of Topicals

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    This wasn't even about me... this was about a conversation I had with a friend last night about his girl... and he said... well I tell her I love her all the time... but now adays, I love you doesn't mean the same as it used to... Love is love... but the words... have changed!!!
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  4. Nasty__Ness

    Nasty__Ness The Queen of Topicals

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    Have to kick this to the top... it couldn't have been that bad...
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  5. $eqra

    $eqra sometimes it hurts

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    Even if this wasn't about you, you wrote it as if it could be. True calling of a good writer. very impressed. raw talent flows from you keep it up.
    much respect
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  6. misspimp

    misspimp a.k.a KATURAH

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    Speaking of love....i was loving this poem...tight shit from beggining to end...i loved the style and the whole message....nice ish...

    mad love
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  7. *GeMiNeYeZ*

    *GeMiNeYeZ* ~§¤Sweet Shinobi¤§~

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    "'I love you' means…
    too many things…
    too many things…
    too many things…
    Let’s go to bed…
    I’m sorry…
    I’ll never do it again…
    It’s the “would ya shut up” only sugar coated"


    i liked that part best... great poem!
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  8. Nasty__Ness

    Nasty__Ness The Queen of Topicals

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    Damn y'all thanks for the thoughts... they are highly appreciated... forreal.... I knew though... most peeps wouldn't take a look because of the title... by hey, to those that Have and left FEEDBACK... Thanks...
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  9. Nasty__Ness

    Nasty__Ness The Queen of Topicals

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    kickin to the top
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  10. Deficiency

    Deficiency True Poetical Emcee

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    yeah, this was pretty cool.. i like it
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  11. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    thats real......

    dunno if i've read u before but i'll tell u what i tell all the new cats in here.....if u expect cats to reply to your pieces, reply to theirs.......just upin this all the time isnt gonna get u replies

    this was a nice piece

    had lots of emotion like the change of color...like it was fading away in the middle...keep doing ya thang
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  12. Nasty__Ness

    Nasty__Ness The Queen of Topicals

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    lpoet...

    yes ya know me... and ya know I reply... Poetic N Nature... Glass Houses... ring a bell?!?!?


    But thanks for the peep...
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  13. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    ^haha...i was like who in the hell is this new cat that keep upin they shit......

    for u i will let it slide cause u are a dope poet....why the change of names....
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  14. Nasty__Ness

    Nasty__Ness The Queen of Topicals

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    I couldn't get into my account... But ya know I be telling people what I think... Besides.. this it what I go by on other sites too...
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  15. Nasty__Ness

    Nasty__Ness The Queen of Topicals

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  16. vinous

    vinous New Member

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    oh wow, this is brilliant. for reals this shouldnt be need to be upped, its too good to be slept on.....even tho i had slept on it myself....woops.

    but i really feel what ur sayin in this, alot of peeps have abused the word love, its thrown round too easily these days.

    again, great piece. pz.
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  17. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    Next time ya wanna speak to me…
    Say it with out the “I love you”

    ^^^

    damn!!! really powerful line right there. This was a really good piece, you really capture how loosely the words "i love you", can be.

    stay up, much love, peace
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  18. mr.rip

    mr.rip New Member

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    hooooooooooooot
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  19. Nasty__Ness

    Nasty__Ness The Queen of Topicals

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    damn y'all thanks for the responses... I trust when I say I will peep y'alls as well soon....

    But really thanks...
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  20. skandelous_lala

    skandelous_lala back from the dead

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    dope piece..interesting insight on the topic of love that has done many times over but this kicked it up a whole other level.
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