I Don't Write Poetry

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  1. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    ^^ I can't believe how bitter this dude is...he dug up an old ass thread to tell me this shit...It's not MY fault your ass looks like a frog...Go slap your mama cuz it's her fault she missed with the hanger. lol
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  2. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    And by the way, thank you for your positivity...kids will be kids. (as shown)
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  3. MisterEThoughts

    MisterEThoughts MysteryOfUntoldTruth

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    are u sure u don't write poetry because damn
    this was off the hook very deep and beautiful mann
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  4. varentao

    varentao New Member

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    This was real nice augee. Real nice. Your pieces always seem to have me grinning, even if sometimes only slightly.

    At first i though you were talking about what is now a stereotypical rapper.

    But then the line "i don't even rhyme in every line" threw me off a bit.

    Then it went on to maybe a con-artist of another sort. You know, more overt and more in 'reality'..along those lines...

    Nonetheless, it was most intriguing. Any critique? No. I don't see anything too apparent at all...

    ...resp...
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  5. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    ^^UP...for the hell of it.
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  6. Nasty__Ness

    Nasty__Ness The Queen of Topicals

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    I don't know how I missed this piece... but it was nice... keep write.... loved the contradiction of the title....

    8/10
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  7. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    ^^Up for reposting purposes.
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  8. MISSKEYdaQUEEN

    MISSKEYdaQUEEN Watch the black panther..

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    This piece is so relevant to a lot of poets and the "poet" image....Some are doing it for the art, some for the "status" whatever that would be.

    I looove the way you constructed this. it was so simple and so...ionno...I love it!!
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  9. vinous

    vinous New Member

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    i have nothing original to add to this - liked all of it, pz.
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  10. blackNmild

    blackNmild New Member

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    Well damn.probably the abstrakt-mainstream shit i eva read.It remindz me of da way andre 3000 dresses,dat shit is strange,too original, but noBody'z cklownz it,and everyBody wit an open mind ckan embrase it. This is definetly a piece that makes me look at a level of freeness and non-ckonstraint that i had previously not bothered to glanse at.Sayin it wuz nise is an unastatement.Kareem, u hata, God bless ur underdeveloped mind.
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  11. eatemup

    eatemup New Member

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    this is defenitly a dope piece very creative
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  12. 6ftground

    6ftground BLACKACE/GRIMREADER

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    tight from start to finish.. the point reps some of us..I know a couple of lines rep me and that's no lie.. peace..6
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  13. SNC

    SNC ~ Untouchable~

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    I was feeling this line for line cause it is real and theres no denying it, keep it up
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  14. MURDERGHOST

    MURDERGHOST New Member

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    i like your signature... so i clicked on this link... read this poem...


    and thought...how unique it is...


    i feel the same as everyone else who responded...



    and thank you for sharing this piece with us...





    take care....
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  15. Anaphora

    Anaphora was here

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    Seduce a dumb bitch
    In public
    Knowing only a first name--

    I think if you changed 'a' to 'some' this little section would be more effective, because it implies that you don't even care who the dumb bitch is more so...

    And it only works with people
    Who can't see me thru.--

    Do you mean see through me in the second line? because just after that you say your true colors are peeking through... it's just an awkward phrasing here, one of the few places...

    I don't like the last line though... because you're saying throughout the poem that you aren't normally honest about not writing poems... I think if you changed it to something like: 'You'd never write this down.' or something instead of I'm honest about it...

    I like this quite a bit though, definitely the best piece I've read on here so far...
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  16. glasspen

    glasspen Brooklyn Bitch

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    I havent been on here in a while so this is the first i've read from you. Very Impressive. I'll bee lookin for you when im on
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  17. Clarksvegas_Dan

    Clarksvegas_Dan Registered Voter

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    This was wicked and real and I can't help but love it. I really like your style. Straight to the point works everytime with me. Psuedo-Intellectuals.lol. You hit the nail, somewhere, and it went straight in. later.
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  18. nathedawg

    nathedawg New Member

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    alright alright, everyone beat me to the post!!!

    i like it btw!! your style is unique, you said it your self you are not a poet, but somehow you wrote a fuckin poem, wow, imagine that!!! jking peace out
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  20. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    I'm uppin this almost 2 years later...well...for inspiration's sake, because I haven't wrote shit in almost a year.
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