"I Don't Like Me" New Comedic Track.. Drop Links! Feedback will be returned :)

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  1. Jaiz

    Jaiz JaizMusic.com

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    A track in which I do what I do best.. diss myself heh It's called "I Don't Like Me" It's the 4th track on the page. Beat done by Snyder. Check it out at: http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandID=11660

    Please leave some feedback. Drop links and I will return all favors :)

    Download the high quality mp3 at: http://www.betarecords.com/download.php?songid=29771

    Jaiz
    I Don't Like Me
    2006

    Homey let's get this cracking
    I couldn't find a real rapper so I'm blazing this joint
    Time for a rap
    Word to your mother
    I fucked your baby's momma
    And now your daughter's got a brother


    Mic check 1 2 suttin'/
    Don't mistake me as an emcee because I'm frontin/
    I don't really rap very well can't you tell?/
    The way my lyrics are crappy as hell/
    You can point me out in a crowd without searching/
    Cause my nose is bigger than a fuckin black person's/
    I went to a doc to try to get it reduced/
    But the doc said, "I don't operate on boobs"/
    So again I lose like everything in my life/
    Can't find a girlfriend cause I turn them into dykes/
    Can't drive a car or ride bikes/
    So how the fuck am I gonna ride a beat right?/
    When the whole crowd won't throw their hands up/
    I deny it and say they were wearing handcuffs/
    Cause I live in a state of endless denial/
    Ya won't see me laugh cause my nose gets bigger when I smile/

    (Chorus)
    I Don't Like Me/
    C'mon God switch my dna/
    Cause I Don't Like Me/
    Neither do girls and I refuse to be gay/
    So I hope I get a disease, cancer, or AIDS/
    Cause I'm sick of this bullshit known as Jaiz/
    If you're sick of my shit than point your gats at me/
    And unload that bitch and make us both happy/


    The only man to rhyme man with man/
    If you don't understand than listen man/
    For the LD I just rhymed man with man/
    Like I said in the first line of the second verse of this jam/
    Anybody got some weed?/
    Cause I need to be more happy/
    Cause rapping makes me start gagging/
    Stressing me out to point where I get bacne/
    And my fantasy and my ultimate goal/
    Is to be in a snuff film... where I am the one killed/
    Or have my lungs filled with enough nicotene/
    That I'll need life support just to breath/
    Cause I wanna die more than life itself/
    'God damn that guy needs some help'/
    I guess you can tell that I'm bad for my health/
    Yet I live in this condo all by myself/

    (Chorus)
    I Don't Like Me/
    C'mon God switch my dna/
    Cause I Don't Like Me/
    Neither do girls and I refuse to be gay/
    So I hope I get a disease, cancer, or AIDS/
    Cause I'm sick of this bullshit known as Jaiz/
    If you're sick of my shit than point your gats at me/
    And unload that bitch and make us both happy/



    Rappers like to battle each other and add the tracks to their shelf/
    I'd do it too, but I'm too busy battling myself/
    When amused I look just like a laughing elf/
    And when I rap I like to wear an anthrax help/
    In hopes that I'll never have to hear my voice again/
    And if I was famous this track would probably start a trend/
    If only my momma had believed in SIDS/
    I wouldn't be an example for these Emo kids/
    Who need to bitch over needless bullshit/
    I'm a nice guy so I'll feed you some bullets/
    Fuck it yo cause I'm a mad man/
    Don't believe me watch me fuck your girl while she's in a handstand/
    Shoot you in the face while you're taking a shit/
    And make you go to heaven with toilet paper bitch/
    Than I'll ask God to forgive my sins/
    So when I die I'll go to heaven so I can slit your wrist/

    (Chorus)
    I Don't Like Me/
    C'mon God switch my dna/
    Cause I Don't Like Me/
    Neither do girls and I refuse to be gay/
    So I hope I get a disease, cancer, or AIDS/
    Cause I'm sick of this bullshit known as Jaiz/
    If you're sick of my shit than point your gats at me/
    And unload that bitch and make us both happy/
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  2. Cheez

    Cheez New Member

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    thanx for hitting me up-
    Beat was tight, hook was cool and funny "Can't drive a car or ride bikes/
    So how the fuck am I gonna ride a beat right?/" pretty funny. at first i thought this was serious cuz i didnt read the link so my bad but still i didnt see what really was supposed to be funny. If you added more description on what you do that makes you funny then it would be much better. your flow delivery and all that is ill, i dig your voice and style.
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  3. Dalby Sound

    Dalby Sound The Radio God

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    The irony of that line is that you rode this beat nicely. lol I've been thinking of making a track like this for awhile, I guess this'll teach me for being so fuckin lazy. lol My only complaint is I can really hear your breath pauses, need to clean those up in post prod before the mix down. Other than that, nice clean track and pretty funny too.
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  4. slumpyjohnson

    slumpyjohnson I.K.E. B!TCH!!!

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    Thanks for the feed doggy....You buggin mane. This is entertaining and the flow is coo, meshes well with the beat. Yeah x out the breathing, its a tedious process fam, but yeah take the eztra time. Coo Drop playa. Stay up.

    One
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  5. ssssslawk

    ssssslawk A wah di bloodclat dis

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    you got a different voice. its cool, for this track it's perfect, lol. the hook is mad weird, cool feeling to it. like in those cartoons where the kids are afraid of clowns. lol. the beat fits the track. almost makes you think about whether you are joking or not for a sec, but since you told us, lol.

    If only my momma had believed in SIDS/
    I wouldn't be an example for these Emo kids/

    ROTFLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLL;ldgjfds;g

    very nice track, i like it overall. I don't think theres a big breathing problem, i didn't really notice it too much. maybe thats just me, haha.

    nice track.
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  6. Neruk

    Neruk Runky Runky

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    haha this is actually pretty good, at 1st i was like wtf, then i just keep listening while enjoying it

    i was actually thinking after the intro you were going to come in fuckin rippin it quick like, that would have been sick.. but this was still pretty dope/funny

    i dont like you either :)
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  7. Envizioneri

    Envizioneri Gifted n' Prolific

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    not too bad of a track.....definitely original in the idea, and you ridin the beat soliddelivery pretty plain, though and quality could use work....though, quality is like the least important thing to work on over the internet....overall, tight man....I'm feelin

    Envizion
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  8. Jaiz

    Jaiz JaizMusic.com

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    word I did work on the breath pauses as I lowered them by -10 db. Most of the breath pauses I don't hear. I hear about 4 or 5 breath pauses, but I don't think there all there loud. Anyways thanks for feedback y'all

    [edit] Ok I just lowered the breath pauses once again and re-uploaded the song:)
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  9. Triple_N

    Triple_N Embodiment of a tru emcee

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    okay.....intro I didn't really find comical....beat is amateurish an a lil too left field for my taste......u riding beat though.....however overall flow is basic.......delivery is unique, I'll give it that...I wasn't feeling it..but I give u props for trying something different....hook......technically sound it rose wit the melody but jus wasn't catchy to me.....lyrically u was saying sum silly shit an the concept was silly but I didn't find it funny.....this is a tough track to review cuz I personally aint feeling it but I respect its creativity.......jus keep dropping son...u a compelling kat...stay up.........1, oh an props on the feed
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  10. Jaiz

    Jaiz JaizMusic.com

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    Thanks for the feedback Triple N
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  11. bensik

    bensik No Vaccine.

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    lol...first off i'm not takin the track too serious - i'm sure its not suppose to be.
    i'm feelin this for it to be on some funny shit though.
    voice is mad diff but thats coo'. its a pretty ironic track.
    couple funny lines in there. keep doin ya thing bruh.
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  12. RiggsofHTI

    RiggsofHTI New Member

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    this was on some weird shit lol..flow was cool beat was hot and lyrics and content were..im not sure lol..wut kinda drugs you gettin cus i want some of dat..haha..but keep up the good wrk

    -RIggs
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  13. littleslimlocc

    littleslimlocc New Member

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    lmao - tellin me i'm bringin comedy - handcuf line was tight lmao

    dope work homie, we know you can flow i dont gotta critique much

    good cut right here doggie
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  14. SNYder

    SNYder b-b-b-buckets!

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    Thanks to everyone who liked the beat. Glad people are likin the song too. Jaiz did a good job on the rap and the vocal production.

    P.S. I havent been on these boards in years. Can't believe my account still works.
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  15. doubl3

    doubl3 aka AyHay

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    lmaooo @ this, oh man, made my day, funny shit, like your style, lol @ the dyke shit, the handcuff line ..lmao ..lol @ battling yourself, yea, dope shit..
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  16. Jaiz

    Jaiz JaizMusic.com

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    word thanks.. glad to see all the positive feedback :) Keep the replies coming :D
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  17. MC_Critikal

    MC_Critikal New Member

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    yo thanks for hitting me up...the reply was much appreciated....aight im gonna hit you back

    hahaha dope lyrics, i read them before i listened, then followed along....funny ass song, I'm feelin it....your voice is on some different shit, I dont mind it though- you seem to make it work....fly ass flow, and a sense of humour to boot...keep doin it man

    -Crit
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  18. Urban AKA

    Urban AKA Proper Respect

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    Thanks for leaving feed on my track.

    This joint typically isn't something I'd be into, so don't be offended because I'm not really feelin it. But for the type of song it was, you served it justice, beat wasn't really my style, but you flowed over it nicely. Voice fit perfectly with this song. Some of the lyrics made me chuckle. Def original. This is one of those songs that'd have to grow on me. It's straight though homie.
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  19. Jaiz

    Jaiz JaizMusic.com

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    aiiight thanks
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  20. Garim

    Garim New Member

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    thanks for feeding

    lol @ the voice

    beat is cool not somethin i usually dig but not bad

    ya voice is cool, cant tell if its serious or jus playing tho lol.. lyrics pretty good n funny for clownin yaself

    its a good track but like some others said not my kinda ish.. good ish tho
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