Hymn To Apollo

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  1. Madnick

    Madnick Modern Laureate

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    Have you won, Apollo, your father's place, and stolen his lightning rods?
    Usurped all the heavens to blot out the paler lights of the lesser gods?
    Your skies are clear, and only the single eye of your golden being
    illuminates everything, lighting our way and fixing the range of our seeing.

    We, today, aspire to be like you, in all ways, lord Apollo.
    Yours is the standard of light we love, and we all long to follow;
    high above turmoil, watching it broil, safe and aloof with your distance,
    looking down with your detachment and a cool resolve of resistance.

    Young like you, we all want to be ever-younger than springtime;
    the worst abuse we any of us suffer is being called "past prime".
    All of us today are in love, Apollo, with your slender body of marble;
    we think of it eating, or running, or shopping, or lifting the barbell.

    Young women, as men, we want your physique with its potent youthful appeal:
    smooth cheeks and flat tummies and sun-gilded hair are perfect for clinching a deal.
    Everywhere today, you reign Apollo, we work and live by your grace,
    as we watch you fire your hunting arrows far and deep into space.

    Your eye, Apollo, looks up and across and down on every thing,
    and bedazzled nights, clowning under your lights, make even the birds sing.
    And pity, great Lord, those who fall from your grace, to that foul pit of depression;
    out of your light, and out of your sight, is cold, and the worst oppression.

    And muffle the voices of those, God of light, who speak of rich lives underground;
    they cannot know of that which they speak since their reasoning is not sound.
    You have no brother who lurks in the dark, no counterpart drenched in mystery,
    the myths that say you have are wrong, for myth is mere faulty history.

    So we pray, Apollo, beam us up, to the Elysian fields of your dreaming;
    enlightened and free we are ready to soar, with no earthly soul for redeeming.
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  2. Amerrorist

    Amerrorist American Terror Is..

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    You've truly captured the essence of Apollo. All mythology is imaginative, you really added your own footstep in the past.

    And muffle the voices of those, God of light, who speak of rich lives underground;
    they cannot know of that which they speak since their reasoning is not sound.
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  3. UFO the Phoenix

    UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS!

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    woooord up

    tight poem yo....this was very different from your other pieces...you show much diveristy which is something I highly respect....very original....nice word-play and imagery....I'm not into the whole mythology but I was feeling this regardless....stanza 3 was my favorite part

    interesting piece

    props

    PEACE AND GODBLESS
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  4. Madnick

    Madnick Modern Laureate

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    Thanks for the feedback.. It means alot..
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  5. AlmostFamous

    AlmostFamous U got a problem?

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    very interesting piece here madnick....

    I myself dont know much about the person you are referring to, but I could sense you do know a great deal!! lol

    I like how you titled it... good dedication piece

    Famous
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  6. Madnick

    Madnick Modern Laureate

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    Famous have you heard of apollo the greek god that who it is but I figure you already know that.
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  7. AlmostFamous

    AlmostFamous U got a problem?

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    oh okay.... I was absent minded and not thinking at the moment I wrote the comment

    thanks for the clarification
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  8. Madnick

    Madnick Modern Laureate

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    No problem..
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  9. Insense

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    very very nice drop, i was feeling it the whole way through. You definately made me realize that your nothing to take lightly in the PTL. Oh, you have been accepted into "Philosophical Rationale" so throw that somewhere in your sig...welcome and continue to drop fire...
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  10. MisterEThoughts

    MisterEThoughts MysteryOfUntoldTruth

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    This was really awesome thats the only way i can describe it... wow...
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  11. Very good poem. This piece seemed to combine the mythological atmosphere with a modern take on the unchanging physical beauty and what people aspire too. The poem flowed smoothly and I enjoyed it

    Perhaps my fave stanza:
    We, today, aspire to be like you, in all ways, lord Apollo.
    Yours is the standard of light we love, and we all long to follow;
    high above turmoil, watching it broil, safe and aloof with your distance,
    looking down with your detachment and a cool resolve of resistance.


    keep writing!
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  12. Madnick

    Madnick Modern Laureate

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    Thanks for all the feed.
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