Ho's and Knows

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  1. J o o k

    J o o k Win your battles before they’ve even been fought.

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    She was a show girl, with shit to show for,
    A nigga named slick, she would trick and ho' for,
    Bruised thighs, eyes and arms, worn as war patches
    Six inch stilletos, fish net stalkings and porn lashes
    As I floated down the boulevard of sharded glass
    She approached me - to solicit her bartered ass
    Her posture of confidence, her Visine rinsed eyes screamed pain
    Chalk lined lips, where millions of dreams have died - remained
    She aimed, her wittiest banter, "40 for the blow, 80 for the slash"
    People read palms for the future, but I read them for the past
    Each calloused finger a story told, each scarred knuckle a war fought
    Moisturizer galore, but no stories hidden from what's store bought,
    An honor student, a brides maid, a sister, daughter, volley ball and racket player
    Undesirable shell, but so much substance when you peel back the layers
    The moral of the story is that of stones, glass homes, pots and kettles
    It's so easy to judge another, but my point is not to settle.

    Pz.
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  2. the omega man

    the omega man so, it goes

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    not very poetic...good description/imagery and lyricism in this though...I like the message too
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  3. TheInkwell

    TheInkwell New Member

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    ^ how is it not poetic? just curious =T

    "People read palms for the future, but I read them for the past"
    that was damn clever. i love it when people take some idea that i've used myself before and flip it in a totally different way.

    overall a very nice piece
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  4. J o o k

    J o o k Win your battles before they’ve even been fought.

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    Thanks Ink.

    Are THEE Inkwell who you use to post here with us?
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  5. TheInkwell

    TheInkwell New Member

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    nah, it was... INKrypt i think.. i wasn't too active back then though. but for what it's worth, i wanted to be haha.. i'll be more active now as my life is slowing down a bit
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  6. lyricalpriest

    lyricalpriest Rap Games Dawson Creek

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    J o o K nigga damn! why u gotta make a poem about my sister man!?

    haha JK

    naw this was poetry in rap form.. sorta like PAC-esque imo.. good brave approach.

    shit would be good in the RSTL tbh.. *hint hint*
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  7. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    I really liked the third line. The imagery was nice. This piece painted a picture of some of the women I encounter at work each day.
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